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0 posted 2003-02-03 08:50 PM


Dewdrops in the fog;
Each will see a second dawn,
one a new sunset.

[This message has been edited by Ratleader (02-03-2003 09:26 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-02-03 08:55 PM


Very nicely done Ed.
Much enjoyed.
~Hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

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2 posted 2003-02-03 09:02 PM


I like it - Very nice...

I'd respond poetically - but I can't think adequately after dinner...

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3 posted 2003-02-03 09:09 PM


I love the beauty and serinity in this one.

Whispers...(your short one syllable in the first line though...5/7/5 or 3/5/3)

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4 posted 2003-02-03 09:10 PM


Ed...Lovely!
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5 posted 2003-02-03 09:14 PM


I love it!
soothing


Always, Alyssa

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     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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6 posted 2003-02-03 09:25 PM


.........Quickly Ratleader checks his fingers, finds he's gnawed one off.....

He will alter this monstrosity forthwith and with forth........

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7 posted 2003-02-03 10:18 PM


Beautiful, as a raindrop falling from a flower petal. ThisDiamond
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8 posted 2003-02-03 10:22 PM




(smiles) Yes, because everything is intertwined with God and His grace and His light is infinite! (big hugggsssssss) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ed, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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9 posted 2003-02-04 03:39 AM


enlightening
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10 posted 2003-02-04 05:08 AM




Beautiful! enjoyed. Pat

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diadems in curve
glisten on Celestine's brow
teardrops of angels

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12 posted 2003-02-04 08:28 AM


Sunset yields to rise
Morrow's dewy morning blush
New day's opportune


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13 posted 2003-02-04 09:39 AM


wonderful feel to this one, well done!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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14 posted 2003-02-04 09:49 AM


Through fluorescent mist,
Even this dewdrop will see
The glory of dawn.


Thank you Nan 'n Sunshine! You showed me new perspectives. Like the dewdrop, I see more than the poet in me expected.....


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