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Open Poetry #24

Floating on Empty

Amature2
Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 416

0 posted 2003-02-02 05:35 PM

Floating on Empty

Have you seen a heart float by here
It is empty and light as a feather
And has lost its grip on life
I hope it soon return
Engulfed with happiness
The only way it will stay put
Is if it is heavy
Full with joy

Peter J Marcroft
Member

since 2003-02-02

Posts 265
York, England

1 posted 2003-02-02 06:14 PM

Now this I do like, a fusion of melancholy (the idea of a heart missing what it desires) and a sort of comic take on the subject (have you seen a heart...) very good work there

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2003-02-02 06:38 PM

Smiled at the charm of this little piece.
ThisDiamond

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-02-03 01:32 AM

this is so clever!

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2003-02-04 01:28 AM

Amature2~
I really like the concept of this...very creative.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

5 posted 2003-02-04 09:35 AM

A nice lesson...beautifuly told.
Eric

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