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finishing you off
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finishing you off |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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so you want me to write of your heart, hold up my soul as a mirror to your insides, dive in your head, spill your guts, splatter them across the virginal white, dip my pen in your very core for the world to view, before i've even seen your soul's window, your eyeless eyes, not yet revealing to me of your mystery, while the puzzle of you still unfolds for now, piece by piece, slowly how do i know whats eating you, before i write your story, do i finish with doves and bells, fairydust, misty nights,romantic love, or finish with a pierced heart, shot by a poisoned arrow, in deepening doom now, unreceptive to being washed in the clean rain, how do i know your vision, your pain, or numbness, yet you ask me , so innocently and compliment my poetry, and i read in, the wrench that i am, put on my own spin, take the challenge, take the hit that you gave me, selfishly, but mainly you see, im just afraid, that i may or may not paint, the masterpiece that youve requisitioned...... sorry, couldnt resist your inspiration,,,,,,i owe you one [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (12-19-2002 07:16 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Not sure who you owe here... but whomever inspired this has my thanks... |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
OH i like this look inside ...sounds like all they want you to know is their resume. Enjoyed~ ~Salty [This message has been edited by Salty (12-19-2002 05:29 PM).] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I've said this so many times....(almost every night as I look at that last sip of that last can from that last six pack)....very interesting write Goddess.. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Toe... only 6? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I told a mutual friend of ours the other night that from what I've read of you, that you seem to be "one of us"-- I relate to the edgy reality of your style lady. very much so. consider me a fan. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Hair...ya did notice I said "last" six pack for the night didn't ya. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
yo, likes whats up with you two gentlemen using my turf.......be gone, before i put a spell on your house.....only kidding, need i even say that.........  )))))))serenity, thanks, thats quite a compliment, truly appreciated here..... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
inkedgoddess - after reading this poem twice I had to reply with a writing, hope you don't mind... Write of a heart soft, a being wandering with hidden gentle eyes… Puzzles form mystery, yet romantic love sighs deeply inside… Visions are of tenderness, caring, but pains have run deep, slowly passed onto another time in space… Masterpieces need not be painted, only a word, or a thought to inspire a muse with a romantic pen… BC |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I enjoyed this interesting poem. Thank you..  "Love makes the world go around" |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
no i dont, bill, this is terrific and a bit more edgy for you, in its still romantic/dreamy way. thank you for echoing off my words, as i echoed off of other words read by these windows. sincerely,really,michele aslo, i love the light and the pretty things, but im drawn to dark too |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
You rule inked  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
inked you rule oops didn't think it came through the first time my computer is screwy..that said it bears repeating anyway [This message has been edited by Aenimal (12-19-2002 10:32 PM).] |
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Laney Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 85Illinois |
Edgy, Romantic, inquistive. I give it two thumbs up!!  Great Write!! --Alana |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
This has the....is there such a thing as "keen bluntness?" If so, this has it. As a "mutual friend" remarked, there are some that appreciate an honest reveal. Good stuff Michelle friend, Ed |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
raw, earthy, and just the style I love--a WOW!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
why thank you,ed, yes, you for one, have seen a glimpse of the "keen bluntness" (i like that terminology) sometimes it gets me into trouble tho, tu amiga,michele |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) I love this, sweet friend, you know how to paint that pure masterpiece and you do it so eloquently! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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