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rm711
Member

since 2002-11-30

Posts 131
Wiltshire, England

0 posted 2003-02-02 05:50 PM

Nothing’s enough anymore
Because nothing’s right
Without you

You were always the light
That I was running through
Life towards

And you were my reason
To wake up even when
It was cold

Without you
Everything is broken
Even me

Even all the things
You never touched
Turn to liquid

Then melt away

Life’s worthless
Pointless
No fun

I don’t want to move
I don’t want to breathe
Without you

I can’t be without you

My life’s not mine
It’s yours
All yours

Just take it away
I don’t want to be here
If it’s not with you.

small insignificant useless me

Peter J Marcroft
Member

since 2003-02-02

Posts 265
York, England

1 posted 2003-02-02 05:55 PM

Sounds like a very personal and dark piece, nice emotive description and some good layering. Well done

SPIRIT
Senior Member

since 2002-12-29

Posts 1745
California Desert

2 posted 2003-02-02 09:20 PM

Pretty deep piece this, I thought it very well done.

poohbear19
Member

since 2003-02-02

Posts 94
Colorado, USA

3 posted 2003-02-02 09:31 PM

This is a great poem! Thank you for sharing it. It is kind of sad though, I couldn't imagine my life without my friends, family, and my boyfriend.

Andrea

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-02-02 09:42 PM

Even though this is very sad for someone to feel this way, you wrote of it very well.
Thanks for sharing.....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

carol
Senior Member

since 2003-01-25

Posts 624
Florida USA

5 posted 2003-02-02 09:47 PM

This is very sad I am trying to decide just what to say but this i will say if you lost this person from a breakup it will get better. If it is through death i have lost a lot that of people that was dear to me also and in time that will get better too i have been told.but both ways take a lot of time.

[This message has been edited by carol (02-02-2003 09:49 PM).]

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2003-02-03 01:21 AM

I know how this feels...hopefully you will see that you have yourself and that's what's important

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