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Open Poetry #24

Hope

Doug Pretorius
Member

since 2001-04-08

Posts 81
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2003-02-02 05:41 PM

Hope
January 30, 2003
Copyright 2003 Doug Pretorius

I mind a little bit
when you're not around
I sneak in to look
at your twisted fate
It caught me off guard
one too many times
so I'll just pretend
nothing has changed

Your darkened smile
hides a lonely pain
Your whisps of hair
cover an unholy scar
It frightens you
and it frightens me
the sinister rage
unearthed to be seen

We'll figure it out
though we're not sure how
We'll find our peace
in the turmoil sea
We'll open up
and share our love
the hope we made
will never fade

Peter J Marcroft
Member

since 2003-02-02

Posts 265
York, England

1 posted 2003-02-02 05:48 PM

That is a very interesting poem, it seems like an odd hybrid of romance and werewolf tale!

But I enjoyed it, thanks for sharing

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2003-02-02 06:46 PM

Glad to read you again Doug. A very thoughtful weave of the difficult spots encountered when close to someone.
Well done. ThisDiamond

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-02-03 01:29 AM

loved the opening most

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2003-02-04 01:26 AM

Doug~
A very intriguing write.
I enjoyed this.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Bohemianaus
Member

since 2003-01-05

Posts 69
Australia (South Gippsland)

5 posted 2003-02-04 01:55 AM

Well written, thankyou

God bless and keep you, Namaste!
Boh

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