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Counterfit Lover
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Counterfit Lover |
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fathomless Junior Member
since 2003-01-30
Posts 11SC, USA |
I'm there at the oceans wake Cool water lapping over the tender flesh of each toe Dreaming of loves perfection My skin soaks in the last bit of the sun Before it rests beneath the sea I wait for he who is of like mind to brush up against me like a blown kiss For his feet to imprint the sand swept halls Where only angels dare tread "Delicate hands I would give you, and lips tasting faintly of flower petals, But your eyes Your eyes radiant as laughter I would leave unchanged untouched You startle the sun with the beauty that emits across the sky" Eyes turn to towards that voice but a whisper breathed through my damp salty hair "What harsh promises you create, That may smash me againts the seas cliffs" Cold dreaming of one kiss from those lips That slight pout, That half smile That moment of winding warmth at the center curling and swelling Counterfit lover How were you born out of the warm vanishing foam How cast from your half dreamed memory do you understand the throbing of a ravenous heart And how from that half imagined mouth Do you whisper such things to me light as fingers smoothed across my skin begun and ended yesterday My twighlight fills with unsuspecting lovers That cry "I'm the one!" I quiver in a strangling web They not knowing that for me there is no one So I turn back to the sea At the oceans wake My chance for he who is of like mind has passed And you who would change me Are not the man I want for me I saw an angel in the marble and carved until i set it free |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Angela, Did you know you can edit a poem on-line? I cannot read this very well and don't know if you realize that on the date line at top of your poem are several items. One is a white box with black edged top and looks like a pencil right corner. Hit that to edit. Sometimes the edit doesn't show right away but if you hit printer after you've edited you'll be able to see the results right away. It won't print til after that and you choose your print button... I noticed your new here. There was a line in this poem about the sun I liked but couldn't read it well enough. I hope I am not hurting your feelings if you meant for your poem to turn out like this. ALso, important at end of each sentence to hit return. Otherwise some sentences wrap around where you might not have wanted to. I'd really like a better chance to see this.... Hugs to you and ~welcome to passions~ Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
some very beautiful lines here... I especially liked this thought I wait for he who is of like mind to brush up against me like a blown kiss hmmm... really nice *s M |
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fathomless Junior Member
since 2003-01-30
Posts 11SC, USA |
pat i dont' see what you are talking about it looks fine to me.. maybe it's messed up and i can't see it I"m sorry.. But thank you for the comments and the welcome... |
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