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El_Campeador
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0 posted 2003-01-31 10:54 AM


Carefully choose your colors
Of a thousand different hues
Aesthetically paint your path
With reds, yellows, greens, and blues

Let your greatest dreams take flight
Design yourself a rainbow
A path to another world
To which we cannot yet go

And though your colors will shine—
They’re not the most essential
Instead, if you could reach
Beyond where no others will—
Bring back a piece of heaven,
And your priceless work of art
Will be sure to touch a heart



© Copyright 2003 Benjamin Graber - All Rights Reserved
christian
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1 posted 2003-01-31 12:01 PM



it's interesting. that you use the metaphor
you used -- colors and paintings and such,
it kinda comes off as your talking about
artists|painters. but, looking at it from
a poetic perspective it makes sense.
good work.

Brad Majors
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2 posted 2003-01-31 12:43 PM


I really enjoyed this! Keep posting!
Mistletoe Angel
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3 posted 2003-01-31 12:50 PM




(smiles) Oh Benjamin, this is so very true, sweet friend, always taste the rainbows as such joy and promise is always being dradled like a pendulum for you, destined to come to you soon! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Benjamin, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

passing shadows
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4 posted 2003-01-31 01:04 PM


oh Ben, beautiful work...just beautiful!
Janet Marie
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5 posted 2003-01-31 07:39 PM


And your priceless work of art
Will be sure to touch a heart
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and isnt that the true gift of poetry...
wonderful surreal write of color.
Welcome to Poetry Land...so nice to meet you


nakdthoughts
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6 posted 2003-01-31 07:43 PM


Your words shine through nicely *s

M

Suetang
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7 posted 2003-01-31 08:02 PM


Hello Benjamin

Firstly I must thank you for the lovely comment you afforded my most recent poem and secondly to welcome you to PIP, a place of warmth, comfort and many friendly people.  I can tell from your words that you speak from the heart and I'll look forward to reading more of your words.  Here is a little something for you :

"In our life
there is a single color,
as on an artist's palette
which provides the
meaning of life and art.
It is the color of love."

"Friendship is the finest rose
in the garden of life."

Take care......Sue

I am in motion
I am blue
Love is an ocean
I'm anchored in you
- Shawn Mullins

El_Campeador
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8 posted 2003-02-01 09:04 AM


Sue, Thank you for those words. That is a very beautiful way of putting love, which I have come to learn really DOES make the world go round (okay, maybe not in physics, but as a poet it appears obvious that there is something higher that keeps the world turning... ). And love is more than just an emotion--it is a choice to give up yourself for another. And that is truly what makes life worth living.

Sorry for going on. Those verses just went straight to my heart.

Thanks again

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