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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
Tired Eyes She searches form, the outline baggy, hanging off her shrugging shoulders. Some days it is doubt, other times indifference to minimize her worth that stares through as seen through eyes whose lenses are fogged. There are risks in life, her thoughts repeat but in blinding judgement she feels incomplete. Her core, senses sight, sometimes out of reach but scans the patterns trying to scope out and sweep a beam of hope, a source of verse lifting her into poetry to ease her composition and give her form release. Her tired eyes compose her thoughts examined closely, in mirror caught. She is her own dictionary, a play on words, alphabetized and categorized, translated into eye words, bits and pieces subjected to scrutiny, sometimes a glossary of indignation,specialized for no one. The mirror mysts her eyes in blur a reign of power begins the stir. She lists to one side and then the other her form manifesting itself externally in an etiquette of code processing the protocol of the day, finger pats to hide the tired, pinches her cheeks to raise the blush and walks through the glass to begin another day. There are risks in life, her thoughts repeat and ventures out her day to meet. ~A~ |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Indeed there are risks... Yet we must step up to meet them if we're to live life to its fullest... Nicely said, A..  |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
There are many lines I like in this poem, as much for intent as poetic talent... "scanning patterns" and "her own dictionary".... Enjoy this entire poem. Well written and causes one to think...one good thing! Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Alicethruglass Well done, enjoyed the read. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
My reply did not come back up for editing yet. I don't know where the 'one good thing' came from at end of my comment.....please ignore it...for I can't remove it right now...strange! As said, do like this poem, quite indepth... Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
every day waking up is a risk to me waiting for what is 'round the bend. Thank you *s ~A~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice ending! |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I like this whole poem alot. Usually my eyes show me pretty tired, 'cause well, I don't sleep. This made me wonder how much more, or less, people can see through my eyes... enjoyed alot! Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
She is her own dictionary, a play on words, alphabetized and categorized, translated into eye words, bits and pieces subjected to scrutiny, sometimes a glossary of indignation,specialized for no one. many layers to peel back, much to discover. This poem has still in my mind for a while. Enjoyed alot. got hips like cinderella must be having a good shame talking sweet about nothing |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
Thank you passing shadows the ending is my everyday's beginning Thank you GG I don't sleep too well either I don't worry about the eyes as much as the circles under them *s Thank you Brian I am good for the peeling  Take your time and see the layers. ~Alice |
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