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Fey Wandering
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I watched her walk passing time Outlined against tangled limb Bare, Move with grace. Caught in iris lenses Slope of neck blending To shoulder cross hatched In glide of twig shadowed Fingers Forgotten lore Bore leaf and moved me To seek awakening flow Of sweet sticky whispers Left on notes of time That they might cling Before falling Without resonance Into reason And the moon Met the wind on half lit Reveal Shrinking pupils Into night blind dream Leaving illusive The silhouette Of touch me, pondering the tangle of roots purchase on stone [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (01-29-2003 11:10 AM).] |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Cap'n...as "fey" happens to be one of my most favorite words, this caught my eye... and the rest of it captured my attention.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
bit abstract and not truly as easily read as others I post.... it perhaps is one that should have stayed hidden in the cellar... I am not happy with it... but had to post it...or delete it and forget the thought.... the muse won again... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Well, Decaflame said exactly what I was going to begin with... I, also, love the word ~fey~ though have not seen it used lately, nor, used it in what seems forever.. I enjoy this poem; each time I read it it is deeper and deeper. Couple lines I liked, this is one: "and the moon met the wind on half lit"... but, overall, I enjoy the little thinking phrases woven throughout... I like this a lot and one to come back to, reading again....it reminds how complicated others can be...where I would fit in the thick of it if I were viewing a her, or ~a him~.....just watching the unfolding and revealing. There are many specifics I'd like to quote...but will leave my reply as such. Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (01-29-2003 11:29 AM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Pat..thank you for the kind words... it is intended to have layers...and intended to be abstract... but I am not satisfied with it and not sure it deserves the kind things said... still.. I thank you for reading and the thoughtful reply |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
will print...read...reread...ponder...and be back......comment after first read?.....I love it! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank you my friend... |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Capt. Ron, I always enjoy reading your poetry, and this is no exception.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Captain, the ones I am never happy with seem to be the ones that garner the most attention... I'm glad this did NOT make it to file 13... as "fey" is one of MY favorite words, too  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ethel.. thank you ma'am... kind of you to say. Sunshine.. ( chuckling) oh file 13 has held a great many and it has room for more... thank you for the read and the nice words. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
 ..and 'fey' is also one of my favourite words!I'm so pleased your muse won! ~Hugs & Grins~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron--Fey is not one of my favorite words, but this poem is...I like it's allusive quality, like something understood from the corner of my eye and some of the phrasing is great. Particularly: To shoulder cross hatched In glide of twig shadowed Fingers and: Before falling Without resonance Into reason then finally: the tangle of roots purchase on stone a great read...thank you! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Man-oh-man, I wish I could write such wonderful poetry. Excellent. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I've read this several times today. Keep getting the image of a tree/woman moving against the sky. Actually it's nice to read something from you again, that requires a bit more thought. (Somehow, that doesn't sound the way I meant it...lol). I liked the repeated lines a lot! Thought they worked well. Oh and I'm mostly ambivalent about the word 'fey'.  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
description: perfect! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Abstract is OK with me - I never mind feeling the need to reread a poem - It just means there's more for me go see... I enjoyed the visage you penned here, Cap'n... |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Forgotten lore Bore leaf and moved me To seek awakening flow Of sweet sticky whispers Left on notes of time That they might cling Before falling Without resonance Into reason ..a lovely scene conjured with these words--most intriguing write--enjoyed!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) I for one also applaud your usage of this wonderful word, I believe to use each word of language is truly a blessing, I always read books and that is how I extend my understanding of it all! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Superb, Ron, a wonderful poem. Corinne |
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