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Dreamweaver
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Dreamweaver |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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I'll weave for you dreams of flesh Said the beggar to the queen A daring weave of intimate mesh Part reality and part dream And he wove - Winding the strands With deft and strong hands Marking the warp and the weft And he wove - With precision bold Weaving dark and bright gold Lifting the dream from its cleft I'll sing for you dreams of night Mingle the joy and the bliss And if you stand and do not take fright I'll mix in some darkest abyss And he sang - A dreamer's song As the weave moved along The music was caught in the weave And he sang - A siren's pure tune While he courted the moon To cast dreams for the sorrowing eve I'll bleed for you dreams of power To keep vigil over day Where meek and might is joined this hour And the weave shows in truth the way And he bled - In tapestry of pain Wakening the sun again As the moon and the stars stood still And he bled - The weave taking the hue Mingled old and the new Dreams of power to stay queenly will I'll weave for you dreams of flesh While the queen took the weave for her own by weaving the beggar into the mesh For the dream and the weave had both flown And he died - And so the queen grew In the wisdom she knew It had come from the weave of the cloth And he died - Till the power of gloom Spilling out from the loom Captured queen, song and dream in its wrath Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Robert Adamson Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 328PA/USA |
I found myself spellbound and didn't mind at all. Thank you. etoodog |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I enjoyed this; you're a talented poet Lynne. hugs you Maree  adding to my library. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
you put an interesting spin on the usual topics, with your woven words, grabbing the readers attention from start to finish |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Kethry, I love to read the poetry you weave with words.....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
This is full of memorable lines. But: 'While he courted the moon To cast dreams for the sorrowing eve' reached out and grabbed me. Don't be surprised if I steal it. Or at least the feeling it gave me. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
reads like a chilling mystic chant...Most talented write. Enjoyed IT!! ~Salty In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Fascinating read from start to finish... I do like this tale you've woven! *S* |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Kethry - dreamweaver it is. I love to dream of things that were, of things that might be... BC |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lynne, I must say you are very adept at writing this....very adept!!! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
another fine story teller here in our midst! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Wow!!! Oh my gosh, I too know that feeling of dreaming of how things could have been concerning how it used to be, and it can be quite an eerie thing when you see those familiar blood-shot eyes through your R.E.M! (big hugggssssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, you are amazing, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
really loved it... Regards O Kethry, Sudhir |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
It's an excellent weave you created here, Keth. I love the medeival touch you have incorporated and the fairytale-like flavor your story offers. Your writing continues to grow  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Kethry! Your muse was alive with this... and she wrapped you in her spirit, well! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks everyone, to quote suthern - I've been a little caught up with the werk monster so I'm not ignoring you. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Keth I was spell bounded too with this one weaving in and out, you are a very taleted poet you do know that don’t you. And I still love you Very well written  love and warm stuff as always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth beloved one, this weave was all that and more, there do you see my footprints now? I love it as you know I do, what is it about you that consistently manages to weave magic even when the rest of us are not. This is another of your magical spinnings darling heart. You wove the web of pure delight Not for you a web of ethereal light But a web that shows the scene Of colours woven in forest green No fated dream for you Kethry Your web is strong and mighty The sights of your Camelot my friend Won’t suddenly come to am end For your writings enchanted are But the sum of you is more by far Feed my soul with your fairy touch And I’ll tell you of my dreams of such Weave true, beloved heart, weave true And your weaving reveals all of you I love it utterly utterly utterly as always you excel  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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