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A Stone's Throw In Judgment
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A Stone's Throw In Judgment |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Each bit of syllable and morsel of chosen word penned on parchment, quill of ink. Pausing in thought, of want, overwhelming need to find just the right touch. Darkness comes upon the sill of a dusty window’s ledge as one by one, candles flame in flicker of gleam, dancing the shadows, into the hall of reflect. Await, I say on whispered chariot. For I stand before the mass of faceless foes, my judgment cast on the chilled and coarse stone.. Can not words dipped in one’s humility carry weight upon the gallows edge? As hands will mold the chosen naked form from the clay of a potter’s bowl. So shall the pen of a poet's life scribe a virgin's blush... a puppies cry....all things... My peers approach in the still of a cock’s night, awaiting the fail of silent strokes, scrolled by hands of a mortal man…extended before me. Swirling thoughts… as stoic and mournful cries are cast against the shadow of a stooped image. Wag of tongue lashes the mold of a poet as a muse stands silently aside....tormented by the anguish felt it's mentor.. Hush this lash of wind in peaked attack, whisper the wish…and I shall listen to the echoes… Each shall spur the stallion, quiver the mare… Though the sting of critics futile blows shall bring forth a welt, a resolve born of a whispering muse shall rise with the candle's wisp of smoke...Shall burst into flames, scorching the bitter fruit, and give birth yet again....to the master of a poet's pen..... (The critics are imaginary....NOT of PiP....) SOOO...rest well.... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Darkness comes upon the sill of a dusty window’s ledge as one by one, candles flame in flicker of gleam, dancing the shadows, into the hall of reflect." Excellent imagery. I really liked the whole poem, but really saw those flickering candles of reflect. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dang Barry! You are just growing in your creativity in leaps! Fantastic write m'friend. ~Hugs~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Barry, You are a master poet! So enjoy all you write. Cannot imagine anyone standing in judgement of your work, except to say: very well written, every time. Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Oh good...thought I was going back to confessional... Tart...the streak of unjust torment...through the write...in the search of the expression of the soul. I liked this... You must be cute when you get ticked! TD |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling heart and if those critics were real they would be presumptuous beyond reason, if they found something to critique in your amazing writing they would be simply jealous fools. Only wishing they had a thimbleful of your talent and your ability. I know I say it often, or I do when I can find the time to come in, but your writing stands out amongst the best of the best. YOU darling man can write, you truly are a poet pas extrodinaire I love this exquisite and perfectly penned poem and I love it utterly utterly utterly. Do you miss me my friend? Well, I too miss you, but time I fear it too short for many appearances of me, however the time fast approaches when I shall have too much time, and that I fear more than anything else. Until then Take care and a happy new year   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Barry, friend, I agree with the others, how could any "Critique" find anything AT ALL wrong with your poetry? You write with such excellence, you should get an "A+" , if ever you are graded......but all these loving people who are a part of PIP don't do "gradings".....only "imaginary critiques" do that..................  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry---The torment of doubt lies within us all, trust your muse, the beautiful soul of you will write still in heaven.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Magnus This is an excellent write. You grow in statue every day. |
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