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Open Poetry #24

The Dying of a Dream

Windspirit
Junior Member

since 2003-01-26

Posts 14
New York, U.S.A.

0 posted 2003-01-27 10:27 PM

There is something that lives in everyones eyes
Yet no funeral is held, when it crumples and dies
It embodies what everyone wants to be
Clearly visable even if you can't see
So descript,detailed in every way
Everyones right no matter what people say
Giving us hope everlasting forever
Working with our strengths and faults oh so clever
Allowing escape from everyday life
From the pain, anguish and the strife
Sometimes the impossible happens again
Its telltale sign from the eyes is sent
The eyes become empty without their gleam
The cold hearted residue of the dying of a dream

Eromyna
Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

1 posted 2003-01-27 10:51 PM

I like this one. I'm always bothered when I see "life" and "strife" rhymed though. They're way over-used.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

Windspirit
Junior Member

since 2003-01-26

Posts 14
New York, U.S.A.

2 posted 2003-01-28 05:43 PM

Glad you liked it, I know what you mean about "life" and "strife" also. Thank you for reading and giving me your opinion..

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