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Scrutiny
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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 Scrutiny Sometimes, we have to review what we couldn’t see because expectation was still so prevalent… but there she sits, surely, it seems that her thoughts would be too-small, engulfed by the rock she is on, let alone all that overshadows her… could a dream ever be that big? Her knees pulled up to her chest arms clasped ’round, she would walk the edge of fear, jeering at it, she would not, could not see the simile of climbing toward her visions, she could only see a scalable rock, and unimpeded by the imbalances still to come, she would say, “watch me,” with no training, no guidance, just the need to seek the edge… she had dreams, but could not see the winding road it takes to reach the top. Then, or now. Somewhere, she is out there, over an edge. I see her in my mind, as that bare tree with exposed limbs, still in reach, though naked to the world, a ghost of what could have been. I see her now, as I scrutinize faded smiles and our mutual losses; surely, reproach is a cold blanket. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Lucky for her, she still has the heart and soul of you with her, and perhaps will turn around and recognize this unconditional love. What a perfect photo to accompany a wonderful poem. Thanks for sharing. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine "surely, reproach is a cold blanket." Surely it is.  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
"Reproach is a cold blanket".. and resolve is its uncovering... Nicely said, sunshiny one...  |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
beautifully said, enjoyed your writing as always. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
"Reproach is a cold blanket." And God is a warm Comforter and He is a great pair of Hiking Boots. I don't climb without Them/Him....and I've scabs on the elbows, knees and bruises on my ego to know this truth of mine... Enjoyed this thought provoking write, Karilea... Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
she could only see a scalable rock, and unimpeded by the imbalances still to come, she would say, “watch me,” with no training, no guidance, just the need to seek the edge… she had dreams, but could not see the winding road it takes to reach the top. I don't 'gush' often...  but this is some of the best poetry I've read in a long time. And the title was pleasantly understated. Really, really like this! |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karilea, I really like this, too. It made me think of my daughter and me.......  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea-- "Then, or now. Somewhere, she is out there, over an edge." Deep and thoughtful...excellent poetry!  |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
ENJOYED |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful Karilea...wonderful thoughts.. Love the pic and I see her sitting there eyes full of wonder. ~Hugs~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
"a ghost of what could have been" I like this Karilea, very much, and can even see myself here |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Wow, Karilea! I once heard motherhood described as having your heart walking around outside your body. This poem expresses that so clearly. Thanks for sharing!! Shenachie |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Sunshine, I enjoyed your wonderful write and the picture inserted, how big that world is around us all, how small we are as one, but together we can smooth the edges and catch her if she falls. Sincerely Rick |
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