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Goodbye |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Waving quietly from my door I bid you farewell Godspeed. You hurry off in pursuit of life seeking what you say you need “Take care!” I whispered in your ear I love you, I could not say And thus, you left to find yourself on this cold, November day. Winter’s chill is nothing to me I’ve a coldness deep inside Never will I feel that warmth Because today, I know you lied. You left to be with her again though you could not say it to me This time I won’t leave on the light the darkness shall set me free Silence holds back my tears but into my heart they will surely fall Saying goodbye for the last time for good, once and for all. |
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zenny Member
since 2002-11-24
Posts 371Belgium |
Sad but beautiful write Hold on, take care, keep writing  Hugs, Kelly The greatest thing u'll ever learn |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Oh my, a tightening in my stomach and a shiver...you captured so well this kind of separation. This is so well written. Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh Sharon, this is written so well that even though it's heartbreaking, it's still beautiful. . . I must say, though, that when I saw the title I was afraid you were going to leave here, too. It seems like so many are saying they're leaving, lately. I'd be like some of the ones, though, and come back here just as soon as i could. I know you would, too. After all, this is "home" and our big "family of friends" are always here with wide open arms to welcome people back.... Thanks for sharing your poetry with us, sweet poetess......  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Oh, Sharon. this one left me swallowing hard. Beautifully written, but so very sad. The last farewell leaves such a hollow space. |
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D.Lester Young Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1219Austin, Tx |
Your words weave a beautiful verse, full of emotion. It is sad that at times we must let go of those we love, for is what is so binding to our emotions. [This message has been edited by D.Lester Young (01-25-2003 12:54 PM).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you so much for your kind words. And thank you for reading me. So you don't get the wrong idea, this is fiction - most of my work is fictional. But I haven't posted in awhile and dug this one out of the archives.  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Winter’s chill is nothing to me I’ve a coldness deep inside Oooh, these words struck a chord with me. Very good write - enjoyed! Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn! I know how this feels...years ago, but you just brought it back to me. Very sad write, but indeed, beautiful! |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Well written as all of your works. Happy to see again. ThisDiamond |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Sharon, this is so very sad, sweet friend, I hope this isn't related to you or your loved ones as my heart goes out to all who are abandoned like this! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sharon, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Spoken with gut-wrenching feeling... glad its fictional. |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Hello Poet de Vine You and I We know each other for a small while I just happen to read a bit here and there and I saw your headline Naturally I had to come and see Glad you're staying and not running off like me However so, my dear friend Very nice poem and yes it did hit deep Helmut The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Poet deVine - your words with sorrow, but with the strength of you. Best to you... BC |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent write Sharon! Hauntingly real and sad. Congrats on the 21,000 Posts. ~Hugs~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Oh - Haven't we been there?... This is fictional perhaps.. But all too real at the same time - Well said, m'friend.. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is so sad. I hope you are okay! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sharon~ This is such a sad and heartbreaking piece. You've penned the emotion beautifully. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
Nice "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
This time I won’t leave on the light the darkness shall set me free ========================== well that line just goes thru me... achingly powerful write of rhymes Sharon. Congrats on your milestone!! "lateradministratormoderatorgator"  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thanks guys..you've warmed my heart with your kind words. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sharon--So well done, it is heartbreaking. |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
This is very sad, but well written (¨`·.·´¨) (¨`·.·´¨) |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Deep and heartfelt sigh, sure do know how this feels, you brought it all back so clearly. As always you have captured the essence of the feelings that happen in different situations in our lives... Pepper |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
PoetDeVine, although you say it is fiction - it feels real and that is the mark of a great poet. Kudos! Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Congrats on the 21,000th post, Devine one...you really pull them out, even when it's fiction... Very good! [This message has been edited by Sunshine (01-26-2003 07:02 PM).] |
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