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Effigy
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0 posted 2003-01-23 06:32 PM


Smooth move.

Sleek, stylish.

Silent beauty.

       Long?
            Yeah. I guess.

Amazing in its ways
       (and in other ways, kind of creepy).
So much strengh and determination
       (drunken belligerance).
            - no. Not so much drunken, as clumsy.
Sometimes premature to strike
       (youthful exuberance).

       Big around?
             Yeah. I guess.

Surely as big as,
       one could want
       or really need.

Like a work of art,
       priceless,
       its not even French.

Colors dance,
       drip down
       web like patterns.
           - cream, gray, black,
             and that devious red tail.


[This message has been edited by Effigy (01-23-2003 06:34 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-01-23 08:51 PM


Slinky, I was thinking of the toy slinky, somehow I don't think that is what you mean here????
Effigy
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2 posted 2003-01-23 08:57 PM


Slinky is the name of my "red tail boa".
Its a snake

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3 posted 2003-01-23 09:50 PM


i was thinking, the formatting works; and its a nice desc piece, but the bit about your snake adds another dimension.

if i might suggest it, i think you should put a pic of your pet at the bottom.

-majnu
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Effigy
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4 posted 2003-01-23 09:59 PM


My intent was not for you to know what i was talking about. (Not for positive anyways) What I was talking about is to be honest irrelevant. the only thing that is real, or that matters, is what you think I was talking about. But thanks for the suggestion.


               Also what do you mean desc peice?

[This message has been edited by Effigy (01-23-2003 10:02 PM).]

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5 posted 2003-01-23 11:08 PM


rofl...how cool, your snake that would not have crossed my mind....
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