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five of cups |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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What sin, what crime of heart is this that I pay the bill complete? Surely there is karmic debt-- remittance stamped in "payment due"-- and just a smile would bellow blast of wind to spark an ember's flame-- but oh to think now that he laughed as I sobbed a moment weak. Something in the way he stood-- veil of stone kept covered eyes... How could he stand so towering and laugh at me there on the floor? "Just get up and walk" he said. Like Jesus as the sage. Forgetting that it was his whip that turned my hairs to gray... I wept. I wept. don't look at me I despise this moment's give. "One of us must die," I said. "Of now, I don't care which." "What is it that you might need NOW?" He jangled keys impatiently. He couldn't wait for open gate-- I sank my heart-- no love for me... I battled armegeddon's fate. Cold. So cold. There in his eyes as he laughed again. "What is it that you want from me?" produced my only grin. and then I just averted eyes, knowing total of the cost. I played a game and tossed the dice... I gambled, and I lost. "The odds are always stacked", I thought, "in favor of the house." A shrug of just another day. I laugh at dreams of crown. It is true, that you can win if you play instinctively. "Stop the game while you're ahead." Know when it's time to leave. So I call for the pit boss. "Please come rate my play. I've lost a bit of silver here." Complacently he dug my grave. I will take the compensate and leave--washing the dust from feet. Cash the chips and count the loss, and pray there's something left for me. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
you know..some poems bleed... and this one does..like an artery cut..with the reader watching the pulse of heart push its own demise. |
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Poetic Bard Member
since 2003-01-22
Posts 84Canada, BC |
Wow, the entire piece held my gaze as I passed over each word, every syllable. This piece is very well written, it held me close and did not let go till it was over. Sounds like it carries a story with it. Beneath, there is more beneath, but, what is there in the end? More beneath? Or something more? |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Serenity.... damn girl...you just wow me  |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity blaze - always would there be something left for you, gaze into the cypress and see... BC |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I second the wow, this is SO well written! The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karen, you are a writer, ya know???  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
It is true, that you can win if you play instinctively. "Stop the game while you're ahead." Know when it's time to leave. Easy for you to say...  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
There is something magical about the way you bleed onto the page! Amazing. ~Hugs~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Excellent. ThisDiamond |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) I believe in gambles, I just don't believe in the kind they make out of plastic and 2 by 4 inch cards! (big hugggssssss) Never accept the triviality of a game and bet on the real essence of life as taking risks in life itself is a promising adventure, this is marvelous, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
um. Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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