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Open Poetry #24

Enduring Premise

Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

0 posted 2003-01-21 05:07 PM

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calm

creeping silently two steps behind
in the streets
and maybe in my mind.

silent

creeping calmly beside my bed
in the room
and maybe in my head.

placid

creeping tranquillity covers my face
{smile} under the mask
and maybe in disgrace.

[This message has been edited by Effigy (01-22-2003 08:52 AM).]

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

1 posted 2003-01-21 07:40 PM

I enjoyed this,
A very interesting write.
Though, now I feel slightly haunted...

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

2 posted 2003-01-21 11:24 PM

Hi Effigy - interesting poem and format, too!

Typo - slowley s/b "slowly"

Cor

Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

3 posted 2003-01-22 08:51 AM

whoops.

thanks for pointing that out.

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

4 posted 2003-01-22 09:06 AM

Interesting indeed - This piece does have a way of drawing you in...

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