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Anastasia of the Oceans Blue (Tribute to PIP)
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Anastasia of the Oceans Blue (Tribute to PIP) |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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From the ruins of another senseless day the pull of melancholy, the pull of shadows bleak the chains of this reality, have always left me weak Upon the naked shoreline, I wait for her there As waves of her wash over, and carry me to sea where everywhere she takes me is where I want to be In the sparkled wonder, of a starlit sky In the arms of angels and the gaze of timeless eyes Anastasia of the oceans blue... *****A rare rhyming poem for me, just thought I'd give it another try. Though I'm not fond of this and it doesn't do justice to PIP I posted it anyway. Inspired by one of Billy Corgan's(Smashing Pumpkins) many brilliant titles Porcelina of the vast oceans, this poem is meant as an homage to both PIP as a thanks for inspiring me to write again(Thus the name Anastasia which means rebirth), and to Billy Corgan who I think is a brilliant lyricist***** |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
it's beautiful, and the sentiments sweet. aside from that love the timeless eyes....  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Upon the naked shoreline, I wait for her there As waves of her wash over, and carry me to sea where everywhere she takes me is where I want to be =================================== your rhymes...however rare...are divine... this is lovely...in its imagery, cadence and its sincere intentions. very well done poet sir...you do both MR Corgan and the forums justice.  I was reborn on the shores of the Chesapeake Bay |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome! You should try more of these! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Doggone but if we aren't glad you are here, too... |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
nice raphaeli, your rhyme is sublime a virginal first, shot from the heart, its feel - unrehearsed |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Aenimal No matter the form, you write well. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
However you write it, it comes out nicely.  Good morning, word artist. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
From the ruins of another senseless day the pull of melancholy, the pull of shadows bleak the chains of this reality, have always left me weak I'm not much for rhyme either but I do like this. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Anything that comes from the heart is lovely, Raph, and this is certainly that! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Beautiful! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Raph, superbly done, simply splendiforous. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! (STANDING OVATION) This is marvelous, I absolutely admire your thoughts of this wonderful poetic haven, it truly is a rebirth of beauty, an Anastasia as you will, and Billy Corgan I agree is one of the more talented songwriters of our generation, both with the Pumpkins and Zwan. (smiles) God Bless You, sweet friend, this piece does do justice, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Raphael, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks SEA nice to see you again Thanks Janet that means a lot to me but I think i'll stick to free verse more Thanks Dixie from time to time I'll give it a go Thanks sunshine that's sweet Thanks Mish nice rhymes Thanks Seymour I appreciate it Kacy good evening and thanks as always for the kind words Thank you Duncan appreciate that Denise and so are your words, lovely that is Martie thanks!! Magnus i can honestly say I've never been told that anything I've written or done is splendiforous. lol Thanks great word Thanks Noah and yeah i forgot to mention Zwan, honestly.. |
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