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Doldrum City
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Doldrum City |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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I used to know where I was going Used to choose my paths quite well Used to enjoy oats I was sowing And I was happier than hell. I wrote some lines considered witty Concerning what life was about But now I'm lost in Doldrum City And I can't find my way out! I've tried each avenue and alley. I've walked each street and boulevard. I'm never one to dilly-dally Just because the road gets hard But, though I'd love to write some ditty To bring a smile or two out there I'm right here lost in Doldrum City And I ain't going anywhere! My friends say "Where's that fellow hiding? We never see his face no more." And all the pals I love deriding Are even starting to get sore. My mind's no longer Walter Mitty. It never travels anywhere, Life can be tough in Doldrum City With its suffocating air. But I'll keep searching for the right street To break these chains of atrophy And help my mind get back the right beat To write some worthwhile poetry. Toerag, I offer you my pity And you can take these words as true When I break out of Doldrum City Be sure I'm coming after YOU!  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big huggsssssssss) Oh Michael, it is such a hgard place to walk around in as I am here right now, yet I feel even through air that feels as heavy as a tanker there is always so much to write about and you truly are the master storyteller, so intimidate that Toerag with what you've got as you both will stand your grounds! LOL! (sigh) This is wonderfully written, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Balladeer, thank you for sharing!  May love and ight awlays shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Hey maybe we can visit eachother there in that, err, sweet, town! but really, I hope things ease up and get better for you soon.. 'cause I can't wait to see your return!! Toerag better prepare NOW! Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Michael, I NEVER would have thought that YOU could ever be in Doldrum City...Not the 'Deer of PiP??? OK big guy....guess we are gonna have to break out the gloves and get Toe and LongJohn to duke it out...see which one wins and gets to take you on in a WIT fight... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
even in Doldrum City...you have a way with words  M |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
doldrum city - there you are! I'll bet Toe's gloating from afar but don't be sad and don't be glum If you want I'll come too, chum I'd sit in doldrums just for you and follow in your footsteps too for when this slump is dead and done you'll be around to raise the sun and then those mockers in despair will be caught in their underwear the wind of change, will blow through you till there is nothing you can't do you'll cast aside your air of care leaving doldrum city bare Although you're stuck in doldrum city still your work is wise and witty. Kethry Message to Toe, I know you have a perfect alternate last line but just DON'T ok! Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Michael, I've sure been in that same city for a week or two. I hate that place, too. It sure is suffocating, isn't it, Balladeer? I hope you find your way out, soon, and get back here with everything you've got.  BTW, can you put your address for your book back in announcements? I was going to order it this month, but I've lost the address.... Thanks, buddy....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
chuckling but sighing too... You are NOT the only one growling at the gate! and OH...we CAN blame it on the moon too... AND? mercury's retrograde. AND? hormones. (my old stand-by) AND...it's even cold in NEW ORLEANS. sigh? Oh just c'mere and get a hug... |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Balladeer...Enjoyed.Glad to see that you are getting back on track...Paul Even though you're in Doldrum City You are still quite witty From Toerag you will get no pity "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
I've read and enjoyed many of your postings. Your subject matter is alway good often with a very pleasant self-deprecatory humor. Thank you for the trouble you took in finding the emPHAsis of my sylLABles in "Greasy Grass" Ken J Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
ever since toerag informed me about your publications, ive paid more attention to your poems. ever since i've started paying more attention, i've respected you. and i still do, enjoyed this one--thanks. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Ahhh... Sir Balladeer... how well I understand that particualar part of town. Got lost for about a year or so. I'm sure you're better at reading maps than I, so you shouldn't have as much trouble finding your way out. This piece here seems a good start. Just remember, two wrongs don't make a right, but three rights do make a left. Hope you make it out soon. And a Toe unchecked can turn into some stinky feet! Peace my friend. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
LOL! uh-oh... |
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enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
Great piece, much enjoyed! P.S. If there is going to be a wit contest I'm gonna have to go get some Cliff's Notes, cuz I'm not so hot with wit....tends to go WAY over my head......either I'm slow or lazy......probably lazy. LOL Nature has a funny way of breaking that which will not bend....Jewell |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
You're not lost in Doldrum City, the Proctologist called, he found your head. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You moved?... Geesh, Deer... Do I have to dig deep into the Doldrums and drag you outa there?...Do I have to come down there and get you???... I WILL, ya know...  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Whew! I'm glad I'm not Toerag! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You say you used to sow yer oats? Well, I'm a farmer's daughter You shoudn't sow them in the ground But put them where you awter Now I don't have much learnin' 'Cept for knowin what I know There's yer problem in a nutshell Ground don't make yer oatmeal grow Liz Sorry, couldn't resist |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
There you are Balladeer! I sure hope you find your way out soon. You have sure been missed. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balleeder, A witty ditty for doldrum city, enjoyed. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Darn Michael, for someone in a place that's not nice, you still managed to bring a smile to this face. I think I have an old map of that town somewhere ... if I can find it, I'll send it to you.  Huggles, Marti Most of us go to our grave |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Ummmmm, Deer? *G* It might help if you'd quit trying to read the map upside down. LOL As for Toe, there'll be no quakin' But when y'all play, we'll all be shakin' And laughin' at antics presented - Hope neither ego ends up dented! LOL |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
You're lost Deer?? Did you forget to drop breadcrumbs on your trail? Oh dear oh dear, that sounds serious Your signal came out loud and clear I'm willing to help you out Sir But I'm not close, not even near LOL enjoy your break Michael We wait for you...we always do you know  Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I hope this passes soon but I fully understand where you are coming from unfortunately. Don't be a stranger - you are loved. ~ The soul lies buried in ink that does not flow ~ |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
They'll pass, Mike, they always do! Chin up, boy! |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
i didnt get it |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Hey, calling all poets! calling all poets! sir Balladeer is still needed here! Our Mother, Earth, may soon decide the lowly (cock)roaches should inherit the planet, since we humans seem to be hell-bent on destroying it. So, we still need you to stay active dear Michael. Your Muse must stay on full alert. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Long time no see was wondering where you were off to. Doldrum eh? I can't imagine you're writing ever suffering this fate so snap out of this mood your light is needed here! |
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rOxXbabY391 Member
since 2002-12-14
Posts 71 |
WOW~~ i REALLY liked this poem!! It flowed very well I especially liked these lines: I used to know where I was going Used to choose my paths quite well Used to enjoy oats I was sowing And I was happier than hell. veryyy good job ~*~eMiLy~*~ "I don't think I can make it through one more night. 'Cause how do you answer "What's wrong?" ~ when nothing is right." |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh, boy ... do I know these words well, Michael, lol. A great write to get me focussed and try to find a way out of these doldrums myself. If you find that magic path, you send me some directions, OK? Always a pleasure to read you sweet poet ... maybe we need a fresh duet to kick us into gear and find our way? Best wishes and hugs, /Kit |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Michael--I always enjoy reading you, in fact, your book is stashed under my pillow.  |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
’Deer dearest heart if you’re in Doldrum City where then am I? Probably the Outer Hebrides and there’s no place further from civilisation that that. As always darling heart you write with wit and still manage to make me smile. I can’t wait to see Toe’s face when you catch up with him as you will. Truly this is something very very special, and while you’re wandering those streets look out for me, I’m the one looking very lost and I’ve got no map, you know how good I am at getting lost I make a career of it almost. Fabulous writing as always, you are the King around here and always will be, you know I love this utterly utterly utterly  Love and warm stuff as always Mushy  Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Is it doldrum city..or just a case of the January blues, Ballade'er?? believe in what your heart feels... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Deer in the Doldrums, say it isn't so! Come back to him sweet muse!!! Cor |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Balladeer, I would never have believed that you might be at a loss for words. "Doldrum City" indeed. Entertaining as always. Doc |
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