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And There's No Land Called Camelot
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And There's No Land Called Camelot |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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I watch in helpless disbelief A frozen sentinel, I stare, Unable to avert the reef, The shipwreck that awaits you there. I struggle to correct your wrong Help navigate the proven course Alas, the current’s pull is strong Mere strength is weak against such force. The ship is yours, do as you will Sans compass in the blackest night Cut off the anchor, seek each thrill Dare crashing waves, scorn guiding light And flounder in the raging sea. I've learned again that I am not The captain of your destiny ...and there's no land called Camelot. [This message has been edited by Denise (01-19-2003 01:29 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
ahhhh..the metaphors..the imagery...the rhyme divine...its Sooooo goood to read you Denise...its rare we are treated to your cadenced company  This is a bittersweet beauty! I was reborn on the shores of the Chesapeake Bay |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you, Janet Marie, for reading and for your lovely comments! My muse ran away from home and only visits occassionally, that brat!  Thanks again! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Denise, I am enjoying your wonderful poetry. Very talented. I especially like this and sat here grinning all the way through it. It is .....just right! God Bless, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you, Pat, for reading and for your lovely comments. I think one of the biggest struggles in my life is learning that I cannot commandeer my loved ones' lives. They will do what they will...and suffer the consequences. And I will cry for them. It's hard to stand by powerless and watch them making mistakes. Very hard. But I am learning to leave them in the Lord's hands. His are the only capable ones anyway. Thanks again! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
It's hard to realize we can't control someone else's actions, isn't it? Good to reasd you again, Denise!   to you!God bless America, my home sweet home. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Loved the images and you've learned and shared a lesson that too few have. Let them live their own lives, the important thing is be there to help when needed. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
what no camelot..... dare you say. Denise, wonderful write loved the whole piece. Parker |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Yes, Denise, this is wonderful. I enjoyed reading it....  "Love makes the world go around" |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
this is beatiful! And all too painfully true. It hurts to see others destroy their lives, as you helplessly watch them hurt themselves.. and hurt you too. But, it is always a comfort to place them in the Lords hands. He can certainly handle it, and we don't need it on our shoulders. Wonderful to read your writing love it!Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn! I know this so well...some just won't listen, will they? |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Denise, this is so very sad, sweet friend, I wish there existed such a place and then we could all flourish with such a chivalrous lifestyle of fancy and unadulterated love! (sad sigh) This is touching, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Denise, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Elzabeth, yes, it is, especially when we love them so much. Thanks for reading and commenting! Aenimal, so true. To be there for them, is I guess, the proof of the love. Just wish it didn't hurt so much. Thanks for reading and commenting! Parker, nope, there isn't, it just took me a long time to realize it and an even longer time to accept it. Thanks for reading and commenting and it's so good to see you again! Ethel, thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed reading it! Alyssa, my shoulders have proven insufficient, that's for sure. I'm glad that He has agreed to shoulder our cares for us! Thanks for your lovely comments! passing shadows, no they won't. Very frustrating, indeed. thanks for reading and commenting! Noah, I wish there were a land such as Camelot, in the here and now, where the ideal is realized, where there are always happy endings. Thanks for your always lovely comments! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Denise This is a WONDERFUL poem, beautifully written and with a message that we should all live by. May I borrow your pen? It writes such wondrous phrases I love this. Back to read again LOve Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Denise Now that is a nice way to say it, enjoyed. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
quote: And by with those words, did you ever say a mouthful! Great read Denise. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I once thought there was a Camelot..in fact maybe a Camelot2...but to my dismay we all have to make our own. nice writing as always M |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Wow, Denise this is outstanding, I havent read you in a long while and I am sorry for that. Loved the rhyme, the flow and the imagery. adding to my library Maree |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderfully written, Denise..with a great message! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I'm sitting here shaking my head... because I know exactly what you mean. This is amazing...thank you for this. ~Hugs~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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winston Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 204NW of Eden |
I like the strength versus weakness antagonism, and how it has something of the shape-shifting fluidity of a current or wave. Thanks. It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Elizabeth, My pen runs mostly dry. I'd much rather have yours, dear friend! Thank you for your kind words! Seymour, Thanks! I guess it's better than my ranting and raving as I'm wont to do! Sharon, A hard lesson for me to learn, but there it is. Thanks! Maureen, Camelot dies hard, doesn't it? Perhaps I shall create my own too! Great idea! Maree, Thank you for the outstanding! It's always a pleasure to see you! Martie, Thank you for the wonderful! I need to learn the message every day. I guess I'm a bit slow! Nancy, Thank you and you're welcome! Winston, Now that you mention it, I can see that! Your reply is poetic! Thank you! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
There IS a land called Camelot That's ruled by king and knight Where truth and justice always wins And damsels dress in white. There is a land of good and right Where virtue always wins Where honor is a common bond And God forgives our sins. Do not lose sight of Camelot No matter what the cost. When we allow our hopes to die Then we are also lost. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Denise - this is truly a  I too have learned the hard way that I am only the "first mate" on board ship, and the captain will either sink or sail his "ship". Wonderful write. Chris"Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
To each their own, Denise? Wonderful metaphor...lots of thought here... a mother to a child... a taxpayer to the President... a dissident to a tyrant... I'm so glad you're back, writing! You've been away far too long! But you must know... I still believe... [This message has been edited by Sunshine (01-20-2003 11:17 PM).] |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
That deserves a WOW, Denise. A total success as an extended metaphor, loaded with truisms and the inevitable conclusion of a shipwreck. JkF |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Ahhhh... but perhaps it takes such daring to find those mythic halls of Camelot. All the same, I do not look forward to those times when my own venture forth to test those waves. I enjoyed the read. Peace to you and yours. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Denise~ A touching write. Enjoyed. Sometime we all need to let someone else stear the ship and guide us to a different Camelot...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Denise~ Wise words you've penned here, and beautifully said. I'm smiling at Balladeer's reply...and 'tis true, we must never lose sight of the 'dream' of Camelot. I enjoyed this, my friend...it's wonderful to read you again. Big HUGS, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Indeed... The most we can hope for is to keep our own ships from running aground... The rest of the fleet definitely have to respond to their own individual captains... Good'n, m'friend...  [This message has been edited by Nan (01-21-2003 01:57 PM).] |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Denise, "no land called Camelot"? Surely, dear lady, you don't mean to tell me I've beed deluding myself all these years. Oh, I get it, you mean, in the "real" world, (sheesh, you had me worried there for a minute!)All kidding aside, this was a delight to read, (if somewhat sad).May the adventurous souls you write of always find safe passage. Doc |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Of course there is a camelot! I bought my camel there! Whatever kind you want, they've got If you don't mind the hair. They have them with one lump or two. I bought a dromedary. Don't try to buy one on the hoof 'Cause it's all cash and carry. To think this place does not exist Is all a bunch of rot. So come on down and take your pick At Big Al's camelot!!! |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Balladeer, it must be true, for you truly are a knight in shining armor! Thanks for the lovely poem and for the smile! Chris, yes, and it is a lesson hard learned. I still don't seem to get it most times! Thank you for reading and for your kind reply! Karilea, yes, now that you mention it, I see that it does have multiple applications. Keep believing! Thanks for your lovely comments! ShadowRider, thank you for your wonderful comments! So that's what an extended metaphor is! I think I've learned more here in my years at Passions than I ever did in English class! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Andrew, continue to enjoy those years when you still have them safely under your wing. They go way too fast. Thank you for reading and for enjoying! Paul, thank you! I'm glad it touched you! A different Camelot...yes, you are so right! Thank you for the insight! Vicky, thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! And Balladeer does have the knack for putting a smile on a face,doesn't he?! Big hugs to you too! Nan, so true, there's not much we can do, is there? Just try to prepare for the inevitable, as best as possible. Thanks for your lovely and thoughtful reply! Doc, thank you for the kind words and well wishes for those adventurous souls. It is my prayer as well. Balladeer, ROFL  Thanks! I needed a good laugh. [This message has been edited by Denise (01-23-2003 10:55 PM).] |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
It's hard enough for me to realize I can't always control my OWN life, let alone somebody else's. I just sort of sit back, watch, and hope and pray. And that's pretty much the hardest part. but I hope for the best.  ~sky So you go and make it happen |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
i do hope for the best too for you ARCTIC WIND |
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