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Deep Dark Hours |
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enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
The deep dark hours of the night are the worst for her she lies perfectly still in an oversized bed listening to the tick tock tick tock of the grandfather clock as they resound through her house like gun shots the deep dark hours of the night are the worst for her she lies perfectly still in an oversized bathtub listening to the plip plop plip plop of a facet that never stops staring at a shiny new razor wishing she were weak enough to use it Nature has a funny way of breaking that which will not bend....Jewell |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
wow, this was very striking. hope she isnt weak enough to use it, ever. liked the eerie atmosphere you set with ur words. enjoyed! lots of love, gemma xxxxxx learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. |
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Ada'doLisdo'ti Member
since 2002-12-10
Posts 123California |
I enjoyed reading this piece....As always when I read a piece written by you, another good one. Of all I've lost; I miss my innocence the most. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
like how the tranistion went, i know its not you so im not going to lecture |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
enchantingvamp Good write, sad content. |
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enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
Thanx 4 the feedback guys smiles Nature has a funny way of breaking that which will not bend....Jewell |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
powerful with well written emotion yep this is what it is like when "lonely" comes to visit in the night. great job! Cher Poetry is: |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 God! This is raw! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I truly love this poem, but cannot relate to the last lines and I'll go with what Michele said. I'm not suicidel, I would tend to be more homicidal, smiling here....am actually neither...but can relate to the strong feelings of the write. Too many do go off the deep end, how sad. Enjoying your talent, Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Interesting...some would consider it weak and some strong...James |
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