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Strange Songs |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Strange Songs (revised) The others are asleep - women and children in tents, men on the ground, wrapped like babes in blankets. Sandalwood fog fills the camp, white, ghostly wisps drifting from a stranger’s fire. The woody scent seeps into her bed, she dismisses it as cheap. He sings foreign words, plucks strings of an old guitar. She tries to ignore his soft songs, but in the distance, the canyon apes in chorus. She covers her ears. The melody snakes like smoke – golden tones bringing sleep. Her dreams are with him and of an isthmus within. © 2003 Core [This message has been edited by Corinne (01-14-2003 09:30 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne A little deep, but a cool blue, enjoyed. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Corinne - I like it, I can hear that old guitar... BC |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
What an intriguing campsite visage... You can make anything into poetry, m'friend..  |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Enjoyed the images greatly. So talented, you are. Thanks, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Corrine, it seemed I was looking at a picture of people in the old western days at a campsite....like a movie. "Love makes the world go around" |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
So appealing to the senses...great write. The restlessness of the piece was vivid. Excellent. TD |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh gee Cor! I really love this... Fantastic imagery. ~Hugs & Smiles~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) That's what I love to do in all my spare time, write songs and hope to get them recorded for the youth of the world to enjoy! (sigh) I am also covering The Allman Brother's "Whipping Post" and the House of Blues right now in addition, this is comely, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
This is lovely, Corinne Ed |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I remember times like these |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
love the ending lines.... the whole things is good..but the ending lines stick out in my read leaving me wondering about the dreams and what is within.. as usual..I enjoyed. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ah...you never disappoint. (and this reads quite lovely with Jethro Tull instrumentals btw) you give me the urge to don bells and go dancing. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You paint such a vivid picture that I feel that I was there! Well done, Corinne! |
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