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A slow flame
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A slow flame |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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It's a slow flame eating letters, memories, memories of letters, her voice -- soft stones escaping a glass jar. Air rushes in, cold wind, wet fingers of rain to hold conversation in an open window, at the corner of a frame. A flame throughout windows, those blue TV squares gellid in their half-hues, solemn in their laughter. It's ridiculous, those empty spaces filled with slow light. These crafted pages curling in coals. Sailing away. [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (01-14-2003 12:45 PM).] |
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Miah Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062Pennsylvania |
Wonderful write. I especially liked the opening.  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
it is the empty spaces filled with slow light..... Mikey... one of those images and lines I wish I had thought of and written..it is timeless.... you do impress me...constantly.. |
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enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
Simply adored the last verse. Nature has a funny way of breaking that which will not bend....Jewell |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Mike, as always, I enjoyed reading..  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"those empty spaces filled with slow light." Wonderfully written Mikey! Love this one. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
It's a slow flame eating letters, memories, memories of letters, her voice -- soft stones escaping a glass jar. It's the fading... Damn Mike, I felt this completely. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
bsquirrel - great imagery in this, nice write... BC |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Enjoyed this a great deal and reflect what the others have said. I liked the opening and ending, especially. Thanks, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Air rushes in, cold wind, wet fingers of rain to hold conversation in an open window, at the corner of a frame. Mikey - just amazing choice of words expertly woven together! Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) It feels so strange to see light crawl like a panther behind the corner waiting to make he timing and stalk its prey and before you know it it is so silent the battalions are bottled up inside you but all you feel is nerve! (sigh) This is powerfully eerie, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
you have a way with words and thoughts that I could never hold as mine, so I'm glad you share yours |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Nice imagery here, Mike - A good write.. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks everyone. I found some old writings on my computer back from when a long relationship ended. I had forgotten what her voice sounded like, and only had a vague recollection of what she looked like. After rereading the words on my computer, it all came rushing back, which is good, in a way. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"These crafted pages curling in coals. Sailing away." this touched me... it's like letting go always a cool read |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
images past,beautiful and haunting at the same time |
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