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Blood On Bar Napkins |
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enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
I would have sold my soul for a connection with you bodies coming together like rutting animals was not what I wanted nor needed just to be held with a whisper in my ear " I am here " I was never more alone than when I was with you I despise you and all you stood for walking softly with careful cynics as to not upset this careful house of cards that was your life and all you lived for I despise you for knowing how to make my body convulse my heart sing my eyes cry I'm ashamed to admit the unspoken words between us still hurt I struggle and grasp for lessons to be learned from this I'm thinking I held that gernade 30 seconds too long it makes me sick to think of you living that perfect life you created for yourself while I am here bleeding drinking realizing you were too selfish to do the brave thing fight for us and I was too niave to see you as anything but flawless Nature has a funny way of breaking that which will not bend....Jewell |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
well, it looks like he came off the pedestal, afterall, maybe this is better welll written of your pain unfortunately, thats the best ones, tho, aren't they? |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I read this several times beofre even beginning to comment and still I sit here and am not sure what to say about how it weeps pain and anger.... I can say...it is nicely done |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
enchantingvamp You used the cat of nine tales, well done. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Owie! This one hurts, bad. Sounds like you did sell your soul, but we never do, it's God's... I hate it when they are so charasmatic and irresistable...who can help but put them on a pedestal..I married one and believe me, it was no easier being wife than lover....all suffer so... Stop hating yourself....you don't deserve it....you have been punished enough....and, it is not your fault and there is nothing wrong with you...short of a PhD/Doctorate in Psychiatry/Psychology to have known what this jerk was about... Keep writing for it helps me to remember to be careful which frog I kiss next. And, also will help others who don't have the talent you have in expressing these exact feelings... Please don't think I am taking lightly the pain of this poem...I always had to do physical things to overcome the negative emotions....hope you've found some ways to dispell your pain.... my heart and prayers go out to you... may you have quick healing and strength and insight to get over this. many hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Leona, this is so heartaching, sweet friend, though I'll never gop to any bar of any shape or size, I do see the blood on the paper towels in my kitchen since I lost my sweetheart! (sad sigh) This is so very heartbreaking,l sweet friend, I send angel hugs out to you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Leona, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (01-14-2003 09:21 AM).] |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Leona, I also do not know how to express the anger that I felt when reading your poem. It brought back memories that I wish I could write out the way you did here. Memories of other men just like you spoke of here. I honestly hope that you will find someone who will treat you the way you deserve to be treated, if you haven't already...  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
I don't like him either....and I haven't even met him....BUT, I do know him. You did an excellent job of stirring emotions here. ~Salty In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
A very strong write full of emotion. Your effort makes me think of the words of Jim Morrison, "Break on through to the other side." I bow to you and yours. Peace. |
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enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
Thanx for all the honest comments guys, I love em each & everyone. When I think back on it, when I sat over at the pub completely tanked I wrote these on bar napkins but at the time I wasn't mad....musta been thanx to the " beam me up scotty's " anywho yeah I express myself not only in writting but also kick boxing 4 times a week...now all I need is to get mugged again to test my new skills...ok so I'm sick....grins...thanx again guys for all the comments, advice, and just plain comfort. chow Nature has a funny way of breaking that which will not bend....Jewell |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I don't think I could ever write enough here to explain how deep this hit me. |
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Wise words... Been there...  |
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