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wranx
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since 2002-06-07

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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2003-01-13 01:12 PM

He stood tall
Straight
And proud
If, somewhat gray

But fell suddenly
Silently
Sometime last week

None, but he, knew
For there were none
Around to hear
Or care

Earlier trials
Had left limbs denuded

Many seasons
Bared the trunk of limb

The uncushioned impact
Found him shattered,

Scattered pieces
That once welcomed
The warm blooded
And light-hearted

Are fit shelter now
For only the cold
And the crawling

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

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1 posted 2003-01-13 01:22 PM

an intersting metaphor..but for nothing? or for change?

Enjoyed this..as usual..

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

2 posted 2003-01-13 01:22 PM

That is way too broken for my liking.
Sad, very sad.

Enjoyed this "feeling" poem; touched very deeply, and I hope and pray this is not from personal experience.
Warmest regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

3 posted 2003-01-13 01:24 PM

hmmmmm...I'm still trying to figure it out. It sounds like a tree to me. I'm not a real deep thinker I guess. Anyway, nicely done dear wranx.

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2003-01-13 01:24 PM

You need a dose of Mardi Gras Ed.

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

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By the Seaside

5 posted 2003-01-13 08:45 PM

I can feel the pulling apart, and uplifting of roots that once stood so tall. I like the idea that in the end it provides a home again.

Good work wranx~

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2003-01-13 08:50 PM

Ed, even though you titled it "Metaphor For Nothing", it felt like "something" to me that was sad........
Hope your limbs are staying warm.......

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19

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Ohio

7 posted 2003-01-13 09:10 PM

to be just one of them if only but a day,
and see life from their prospective

Balladeer

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8 posted 2003-01-13 09:54 PM

If a tree falls in the forest....

scorpio
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right...there

9 posted 2003-01-13 10:19 PM

Intriguing write..well done..

believe in what your heart feels...

SimplyGold
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since 2002-07-10

Posts 1453

10 posted 2003-01-13 10:20 PM

Wranx,

This poem evoked sadness in me and left me feeling introspective.

"But fell suddenly
sliently
sometime last week"

I liked this

"Scattered pieces
that once welcomed the
warm blooded
and light hearted"

Reminded and again aware of how fragile we are...

Best to you and peace of mind be yours.

SG

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

11 posted 2003-01-13 10:56 PM

But fell suddenly
Silently
Sometime last week

None, but he, knew
For there were none
Around to hear
Or care

and

Scattered pieces
That once welcomed
The warm blooded
And light-hearted

Are fit shelter now
For only the cold
And the crawling

A stark and honest look at how little some life seems to mean in death. Excellent write Ed.

passing shadows
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displaced

12 posted 2003-01-14 01:23 AM

very inspiring thread of replies to a very interesting piece

Midnitesun

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Gaia

13 posted 2003-01-14 01:49 PM

Love the way you turn nothing into something.
Trees chopped for wood and walls; hearts and bodies like mere disposeable kindling.
Your poetry is always multi-layered.
BTW, how is your multi-layered body doing these days?

above the frostbite level I hope.

brian sites
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since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

14 posted 2003-01-15 12:03 PM

ED--
picking your way up
or
down
the slippery slope?

and?
met a foraging yes

read two time grin

B

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Hurricane Alley

15 posted 2003-01-15 12:53 PM

I too saw the tree standing in the forest, felt the shudder of the earth as it fell. Everything happens for a reason - even the fallen tree serves a purpose - fulfills someone's need. I enjoyed this very much - it was gently done.

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