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Paperdoll
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Paperdoll |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
still dark, a sweater wraps morning coffee on the balcony I bend like a paperdoll, inhaling wind shards to wipe sleep from my eyes so that I may, awake, swallow the sugar and cream of a warm dream..of you don't you see? is it not as clear to you as it is to me? cut me out within the lines and dress me as you would-- it is my need of you that breathes flesh and blood into cardboard; any strength you see in me is born in the seed of you-- hold the paperdoll gently, my love, you give her life "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." Pablo Neruda [This message has been edited by Sandpiper (01-12-2003 07:20 AM).] |
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enchantingvamp Member
since 2002-12-21
Posts 214Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas! |
oh i absolutely loved this! keep em comin' |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
it seems like this is a fragile, delicate love, tho, i liked this poem very much |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Oh, I like this. Trust and love at it's very finest. Warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Much enjoyed, Sandpiper!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sandpiper Excellent write, enjoyed. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This is so sweet...such an innocent and trusting love.......  "Love makes the world go around" |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
wonderfully woven vividly described a fantastic read! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Perfect... I can see the look, the thought from the view in the sip of morning brew, the reflecting/dreaming of the mind... Very nice.. |
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angelfriend Member
since 2003-01-11
Posts 52Michigan USA |
Oooh, I agree a nice one. I can picture her wavering in the wind. Better get her back inside before she blows over.  "The only gift is a portion of thyself" - Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
beautiful! |
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bluRaven Junior Member
since 2003-01-08
Posts 18Richmond, VA |
wondermous~~ luvs~~ "~Sometimes you have to forgive someone because you want them in your life."~~ |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
I'm certain he's a spade in one hand for the planting and scissors in the other to trace your outline. Enjoyed. |
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Nikolette Sadness
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337port richey fl. |
oh wow...i am crying right now...i read it out load the first time i ever read it...i feel like a paperdoll... Nik i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
how'd I miss this one? great write... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely done... and here to hoping she is handled with the love and respect she deserves. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A lovely metaphor - and sooo true of those we love unconditionally... |
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