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Open Poetry #24

Countenance

dhicks03
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since 2002-12-26

Posts 267
Missouri,USA

0 posted 2003-01-11 02:55 AM

She stared at him
Such a portentous
display in his face
Some say
Evil Countenance
Not quite leather;
Not quite lace;

Eyes searching
He looked away
Almost like a dog
Been beat to much
She then perched his chin
Kissed his brow
Whispered... “Stay”

Something about him
As she looked on
He heard a train whistle blowing,
Calling him to come
And as she kissed a tear away
from his eye
He replied in whisper… “I’m sorry”

So many mysteries
About this man’s physiognomy
Sometimes only revealed
by his touch
And hidden behind the eyes
Always to stay sibylline
Was a man…she never knew

© 2002 Dennis Hicks

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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1 posted 2003-01-11 07:29 AM

Eyes searching
He looked away
Almost like a dog
Been beat to much
She then perched his chin
Kissed his brow
Whispered... “Stay”

Wow. For some reason this stanza really hit me between the eyes, with the references to the dog, and her whisper. Very good!

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

2 posted 2003-01-11 08:11 AM

Dennis,

"And hidden behind the eyes"

is so revealing....

Enjoyed the depth of this poem. One of your best..of course, as you know, I've said that more than once already.

Very well written and I love the sensitivity of it....the character created...touching....

Warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-01-11 01:14 PM

I don't think I can ever get enough of you

dhicks03
Member

since 2002-12-26

Posts 267
Missouri,USA

4 posted 2003-01-11 02:06 PM

Wow, Thank you all once again for your kind and encouraging words.
I sometimes look at my writes and think to myself "This was horrible"...then other times I like it. Comments like these tell me that it's not so bad. Once again, Thank You!!!

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