Open Poetry #24 |
Undeniable |
regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
There is ~a feeling place~, just past dread, beyond dead, when all's been said, I stand, stunned, as I discover I'm still in love with ~You~. . . . ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
ah..this one has a dazed hurting ache to it... a few words... and a lot said.. nice work here... |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Pat, there is a lot said in this one. I enjoy reading all of your poetry. Thank you for sharing... "Love makes the world go around" |
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neveah5 Member
since 2002-11-22
Posts 197Ohio |
Enjoyed this Pat I do enjoy all of them though.. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ron, Thanks for the comments, all of them (your comments) mean much to me. Am still practicing, trying to write from mind and not heart. Your reply tells me I succeeded in getting the emotion over, with few words, and left the ache I was going for.... Ethel, Thanks, how sweet you are. Hugs, Pat N, Thanks for responding...Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (01-10-2003 02:18 PM).] |
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christian Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 331 |
ive always enjoyed your poetry. this is no exception. thanks. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
This one has a real ache to it. Good writing, Pat! The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Pat, A good write, enjoyed the read. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nicely written Pat, and the feeling of love doesn't just go away like a wisp of smoke. Even anger is a result of love at times... |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
regards2you - oooo'wwwwwww, very nicely... BC |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
i know what u mean, sometimes it just hits u in the face, when you didnt even know you felt it |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
And cry-ogenics just delays the pain. Enjoyed |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Pat, I know how this feels. I wish I didn't, but I do. |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
hey~ past dread and dead. i like how you said it, succinctly. for me, past the turmoil and into the spiritual! love is so awesuuum peacey poetess~ |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssssss) Oh Patricia, this is lovely, sweet friend, this made me cry as deep down I still will always have a place for Joanna even if she wishes to forget me in my entirety! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, I wish for love to never deny you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Patricia, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I have a poet friend... I have always told her, less is more... just like this. Excellent read, Pat. Thank you! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Chris, Coming from you, that is a real compliment..Thanks Michael and Sy, Thank you for taking the time and replies... Barry, You are right, it does not...just gets buried...I see anger as fear, though...of what?..Hmmm, maybe basis for another poem? Smiling, thanks Bill, Thank you for the very nicely...hugs.. Inked ...true...but, this is not a current event...just trying to sharpen writing skills, using mind, not emotion, when writing...but, this feeling is there, I am sure...TY Richard....Ha! Love your mind! Thanks for taking the time to read and reply; I sure appreciate it. SmartChick, I believe any who have lived probably does...part of life..thanks for responding... Goid, Thanks to you...glad you like, yes, love is awesome...glad you are past turmoil...so am I..spiritual, YES! Noah, Don't kid yourself, no one can forget you in your entirety and don't forget it! hugs and love and smiling here... Karilea, Nice poem you wrote, but, since you and I have never spoken in e-mail nor on-line regarding poetry writing, I cannot imagine who your friend is, but surely not me... Am glad you like this; I'd like to see you try it....I, personally have always liked very short, to the point, poetry, if done succinctly...am trying many themes and formats...I figure I still have about 500 more to go before I decide if I'm very good at poetry writing...thanks for your reply. Am surprised at the response to this and I appreciate all of you taking the time to read and reply. Thank you. Hugs and warm regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Pat, i think not everyone has that level of self-awareness to admit that to himself..i think too that it's better to feel and be hurt than it is to live through life, suppressing your real emotions... nice work! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Kaile, Of course, you are right in that it is better to feel and be hurt. However, for some the damage done is almost immeasurable, and some can handle rejection better than others. It is simply not cut and dried, for relationships are very complex, as are human beings. I don't think we deliberately choose to consciously suppress real feelings, that is an act of nature, a safety valve, if you will, to protect us, similarly the way shock works, both mentally and physically... Again, it is important to feel and grieve....and be done with it...but the time element can be from now to fifty years from now...depending the degree of harm done. There are many in prison today, female and male, because of inability or, refusal to accept lost love...another whole chapter I'm not going into. Also, one other aspect I've learned is about patterning and if you follow back your feelings, and relationships, some often find the original source of pain was from/with a parents lack of love, too much love, the wrong kind of love..and when one can view that and grieve it, it usually ends all pain... Thanks for your comment. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (01-11-2003 11:50 AM).] |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Pat, apparently, i have not really been seriously hurt so far and i guess such immaturity shows...thanks for the enlightenment..one thing i am always trying to change is how i constantly see the world from my own perspective, so much so that i neglect that other people feel and behave differently because of varying life experiences... really, thanks for speaking so candidly..i appreciate such honesty...too many people i know try to be diplomatic and hesitate to help me grow... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Kaile, There is NO immaturity in you whatsoever. I see a highly intelligent, thoughtful, caring, insightful person. To want to know more is the height of living, as God intended, I think... Your poetry speaks of maturity and insight many twice your age do not have. Those are your gifts and I appreciate them every time I read one of your poems. You are perfect exactly the way you are. BTW, I answered you in the other poem, Re: God and Re: my son.... Hugs and warm regards, Pat PS..anything I write is simply my opinion and believe me, I've so much to learn....forever changing, God willing... smiles here.... ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
nice, short, powerful |
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