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kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

0 posted 2003-01-10 12:29 PM

We are like trees in a rainforest,
always competing for sunlight and water,
obsessed with becoming the
biggest, tallest and strongest
Sometimes, we even sneakily curl
around the strong,
clinging on tight,
exploiting this hitch to greater heights

In a village in Vietnam,
21 Singaporeans sang passionately
to the tune of
"Count on me, Singapore"~
a spontaneous rendition
that lit world-weary faces
and warmed jaded souls

It's tough living in the rainforest
But I can't imagine
settling my roots somewhere else

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2003-01-10 01:00 AM

There is no greater song than that which sung from the heart. I wish you well Kaile.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2003-01-10 02:19 AM

home is where the heart is...good write!

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

3 posted 2003-01-10 07:05 AM

Kaile,

Such insight (first stanza)...I really like this. So deep!

Quite the talented poet...

I just read your critique box for the first time. Ha! (now I know where that "tear this apart" came from [Svern]. ...smiling here).

Enjoying your poetry a great deal.

Warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Mon Cherie

Senior Member

since 2001-10-31

Posts 922
Land of Never-ending Summers

4 posted 2003-01-10 11:21 AM

Used to think of Singapore as a concrete jungle with lots and lots of buildings, but never ever thought that it's also another form of forest...

yup, quite true... people seem to have to step on one another to better themselves, stealing nutrients from some and squashing others along the way. yet, in a world of it's own, there are also people who are still willing to serve bona fide.

A really good job. So insightful and thought-inspiring... A trip away can definitely result in some serious soul-searching huh

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

5 posted 2003-01-10 12:41 PM

We grow towards the light and so sometimes cast others in our shadow. It isn't always intentional. The vines that hitch a ride can in time pull us down. The answer is a neat trimmed lawn, but what fun is that? This write celebrates uniqueness in a more sensitive light which it generously shares with others.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2003-01-10 12:41 PM

kaile, yes, you are a very fine poet, with insight far
beyond your years. You write from deep inside your
heart and it shows, my friend........
Your poetry is a delight to read. thank you for sharing
it with us, friend........

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

7 posted 2003-01-10 12:42 PM

I think RS beat me to the point of what I had to say... so I'll just say I enjoyed..and the perspective is appreciated here..

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

8 posted 2003-01-10 10:07 PM

Sometimes we need to hitch. Sometimes we are the ride and sometimes, the trailing shadow. Your sense of understanding the essence humanity is showing.

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

9 posted 2003-01-11 01:39 AM

Mysteria and passing shadows, both your comments are lessons that i have learnt from this overseas trip...let's hope that i internalise them and never forget!

Pat, thanks very much for your support..i haven't been writing a lot recently and your comments made me motivated to catch hold of my fleeting thoughts and squeeze musings out of them...

Mon Cherie, definitely..and i hope that we will one day go on a trip together and relive our secondary school days in Lake Toba!

RSWells, looks like you got more from my poem than i ever intended

..i'm humbled that my poem inspired such thought-provoking comments from you...i'm trying to digest your words and absorb as much as i can...thanks for leaving your mark in this thread!

garysgirl, "insight far beyond your years"...hell no, i am as childish and as selfish as young adults come...thanks very much for the compliment and i'll do my best to conceal my immaturity...

Thanks Ron...i appreciate your comment too!

Kacy, really? glad to know that i have grown up a little, at least in your eyes...will try to grow up more, be it emotionally, mentally or spiritually

thanks all for reading..i'm flattered to come here and see so many comments on my thread...

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