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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2003-01-08 11:35 PM

dreams spin in her head,
fantasies, come and go,
imagination running wild,
saving her
from permanent despair,

legs stay shackled,
holding her down,
from flying free,

stuck in ancient "i do's"
signatures in blood,
of forever more,
drowning in guilt,
not wanting to break
motherhood's saintlihood,
fear of the poverty in solititude,

salvation comes,
each trimester,
under the crescent moon,
by treelined rooms with a view,
3 star hotels,
5 hours of the dream
he gives her, over and over,
wishing she could die in his arms,
right there and then,

her soul stays hungry tho,
even he's not enough anymore,
so she waits,
stuck for now
between what was,
and what may be,

and if you even care,
this is something,
about her

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (01-09-2003 06:41 AM).]

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

1 posted 2003-01-08 11:38 PM

inkedgoddess - your words always say something meaningful, one just has to read them...

BC

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2003-01-08 11:43 PM

So beautifully painted in the treeline of restless dreams. Always well done. TD

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

3 posted 2003-01-08 11:55 PM

Oh yea, that room with a view doesn't look quite the same anymore.

A nice and honest write inkedgoddess~

enchantingvamp
Member

since 2002-12-21

Posts 214
Indiana, & NO there is NOT more than corn in Indiana, oughta go back to texas!

4 posted 2003-01-09 12:36 PM

i love honest writing, i love all the different views of honesty, this piece whispered.....and i think the hardest things, yet most important, are the things people whisper. great write!

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

5 posted 2003-01-09 12:38 PM

I liked the way you wrote this poem. Even though, it was sad to me, it was written very, very well.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

6 posted 2003-01-09 02:13 AM

I love how you release the feeling into words.

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

7 posted 2003-01-09 03:33 AM

This was fantastic.

Very real, very unforgiving and honest, what it is, take it or leave it, but have a bit of feeling, too.

Thank you, poet.

~Titus

"A life unexamined is not worth living."
-Socrates

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2003-01-09 03:47 AM

hmmm...lots to think about...liked it

Opeth
Senior Member

since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

9 posted 2003-01-09 09:04 AM

I have been where you have so passionately written.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

10 posted 2003-01-09 09:22 AM

I had to read this twice to get my understanding of it. Once I finished the second time I was hit with just how good it is. I lived that way for a very long time. Beautifully written!

Susan C.

bklynboy
Senior Member

since 2002-12-15

Posts 660
florida

11 posted 2003-01-09 10:25 PM

I think you have a hit with this poem. It has touched many a nerve. Feeling need to be released and you have a unique way of doing that. Well done!

CSKpoet
Senior Member

since 2002-07-12

Posts 845
Island in Paradise

12 posted 2003-01-09 11:35 PM

excellent write although a sad truth in most cases...It fits most I know or has fit Taken for granted and left with fear to get free...
Enjoyed much, Cher

Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

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