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Edder
Senior Member

since 2003-04-02

Posts 671

0 posted 2003-11-29 10:50 AM

The tree's aglow with glitter and lights
Presents are wrapped ~ bows tied just right

Children are sleeping with dreams in their heads
Of a jolly old elf dressed neatly in red

New fallen snow blankets the ground
As holiday spirit and good tidings abound

Family and friends arrive from afar
To gather 'round a warm winter's hearth

With joy and love in loud voices we sing
To celebrate the birth of our King

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

1 posted 2003-11-29 11:04 AM

Impeccable rhyme, rhythm and imaging in this one, save for the last line...it seems, unless it's my reading of it, that a 3 syllable word is needed before "King," such as wonderful or glorious.

What do you think, Owner of the decision?

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Star T
Member

since 2002-07-12

Posts 182
Philadelphia, US

2 posted 2003-11-29 01:15 PM

wow what a nice christmas image.every bit of it true...but it saddens me sometimes, how most ppl know not the real meaning of Christmas.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

3 posted 2003-11-29 02:44 PM

(big hugggsssssss) As much as I believe we should hold onto these traditions as well, I wish all our children knew what the true meaning of Christmas is and not think of it is all capitalistic! (sad sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is wonderful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Edder thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

4 posted 2003-11-29 08:56 PM

Awww, this is so cute!

Love,
Terri~

Edder
Senior Member

since 2003-04-02

Posts 671

5 posted 2003-11-29 09:38 PM

VAS- it works better for me this way, but that may be because I read with a "southern drawl".

Star T- That does seem to be the case. Thank you for the read and comment.

Noah- Thank you, you always have a kind word.

Terri- Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed.

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