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zaaclindsay
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since 2009-08-12
Posts 111
Ottawa Ontario

0 posted 2009-09-22 04:13 AM



In thru the mist
I slip into forest deep
A midnite's sun of moonbeams
couldn't help a body see

The floor still warm from sunlight
leaves shift softly in the breeze
and I come to rest
near a babbling brook
and fall down to my knees

To drink cool water precious
from the river of winding light
that feeds the soul and renews my heart
against the perils of the night.

Dream softly,gently precious soul
enjoy the slumber, yours at last
and make your way with special care
for your days are numbered as
the grass

Find the shoreline
and learn to be
but, first good soul;
but first...
to sleep.

I kept wondering why that frisbee kept getting bigger and bigger....and then it hit me.

© Copyright 2009 David I Graf - All Rights Reserved
GBride
Senior Member
since 2009-07-02
Posts 538

1 posted 2009-10-27 07:12 PM


This is a truly beautiful and touching poem!
I especially liked the first stanza as it set the scene for all that follows perfectly.
I never advise people on any changes in their poems unless it is an obvious error.
This is your poem. It's perfect just as you wrote it.
God Bless Bob.

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