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what sunlight creates ---

Zyskandar A. Jaimot
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since 2008-02-06

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FL-USA

0 posted 2008-02-07 08:19 AM

what sunlight creates

bamboo stalks grow straight
up toward a eternity
green green remembered
to thrust at revered Brahma
leafy heavens of respect

Fareed
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since 2008-02-08

Posts 75

1 posted 2008-02-12 04:43 AM

Short and sweet, reminds me of Henry Wadsworth Longfellow.

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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Eternity

2 posted 2008-02-13 10:54 AM

Beautiful!

love
Margherita

Lighthousebob
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since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
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3 posted 2008-02-14 05:19 PM

(5) bamboo stalks grow straight
(7) up toward a(n) eternity
(5) green green remembered
(7) to thrust at revered Brahma
(5) leafy heavens of respect

I like the sentiment behind your poem (the eastern – oriental feel of it) with its natural flowing references to bamboo and Brahma and I like how you gave it a haiku(ish) type feel. Very nice.

-Bob

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