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Encarta
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since 2002-02-14
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My homeland is not of the world

0 posted 2007-04-15 10:02 PM


Yesterday I decided to return to read my old poems.While I read them, I remembered why I wrote them, and wondered why I ever stopped.So, though it was already 1 in the morning, I picked up a pen and paper, and wrote.I'm kind of indifferent about it.I decided to attempt my favorite format again, but I think the repetitive line takes away from the effect of the format... Either way, I'm back.I hope you like it.LighthouseBob, you're the one who commented on the formate so long ago, do you think this still does it justice, or should I stop the repetivness when using this format?

I Surrender All to Thee
by, Matt

I sin for I'm still an Earthly man
But my sins were nailed to the cross back then
In worship, I surrender all to Thee

Molding me, weak by weak
You work to make me Holy, though I'm meek
In obedience, I surrender all to Thee

Temptations I pray to overcome
I might succeed, if I bite my tongue
In hope, I'll surrender all to Thee

Wisdom I've searched for and tried to reach
Yet in vain for it's love I shall preach
In failure, I surrender all to Thee

Next it was love I sought with my mind
But your love far transcends what I may find
In awe, I'll surrender all to Thee

Time has been wasted, I wonder if I'll fulfill
Everything pertaining to me in Your will
In your timing, I surrender all to Thee

Sometimes I feel as if I'm all alone,
Though You're with me, standing on the stone
In Your strength, I surrender all to Thee

The heart is the strongest will to break
Yet despite its groans and ache
In triumph, I surrender all to Thee

When you call me to the grave
Grant me the strength to obey
In love, I surrender all to Thee

And when the trump shall sound
My soul shall rise, still bound
In eternal glee, I surrender all to Thee

When I step through those gates
I will ceaselessly praise you for my fate
In song, I surrender all to Thee

When I receive that precious crown
Alas, at Your feet I'll set it down
In humbleness, I surrender all to Thee

My faith is weak, but Your love is strong
I know You will guide me as You have all along
In the end, I surrender all to Thee

"They do not love that do not show their love.”-Shakespeare

© Copyright 2007 James M. Hohne - All Rights Reserved
jjote
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since 2002-12-25
Posts 1088
Ontario, Canada
1 posted 2007-05-02 08:44 AM


I think the ending lines of each stanza, "repetitive" they may be, gives the poem a sense of piling up with more focus the things that you want to "surrender" to God.

Though some lines can be trimmed down a bit maybe.  

sandgrain
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA
2 posted 2007-05-11 08:55 PM


I love it as is.  The last lines add so much to each stanza because you've given such feeling in the reasons you surrender all.

Thank you for sharing it.

  Rae

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