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Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

0 posted 2006-03-07 10:00 PM

As my life brings with it millions of seed,
Not yet conceived to see the harmony,
When we all came from one God,
It makes me afraid to ask,
What he does not give to me,

What could I ever do,
But stay true to you,
In my life, and in my past,
Many of devilâ€™s evil thoughts
Hide and ask me to give up this life,

Help me find the wings,
And use them to fly to my lord,
My heart is scared now,
Afraid that Iâ€™ve lost touch with you somehow,
No more wise ways I follow,
Instead I think of my hearse,
Who will I trust when I get old?

Besides writing,
The only good I do is thinking,
Lead me to your home and give me life,
What once was envisioned as my wife,
In the end of my life, donâ€™t want to bring poison,
To the millions seeds I bring with me,
But life is full of haters,
I fall to my knees to ask you once more,
That itâ€™s not my time to go and be scared,
But these thoughts have me gone mad,
When the world will remember,
As another lost child whom you let loose,
On this world before my time.

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

sandgrain
Member Elite

since 1999-09-21

Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA

1 posted 2006-03-10 04:30 PM

I've revisited this write a few times to get a fresh look, hoping to better understand the ending. However, maybe because I'm too old, I cannot connect with the meaning here:
(my questions)
"Lead me to your home and give me life,
What once was envisioned as my wife,
(would that be heaven or an earthly relationship?)
In the end of my life, donâ€™t want to bring poison, (by having children?)
To the millions seeds I bring with me,
But life is full of haters,
I fall to my knees to ask you once more,
That itâ€™s not my time to go and be scared,
But these thoughts have me gone mad,
When the world will remember,
As another lost child whom you let loose,
(Who? You or your offspring?)
On this world before my time."

Musicmaker1969

Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 589
Peterborough, Ontario Canada

2 posted 2006-03-11 08:34 PM

I think you should use your spell check a little more often as there are many spelling errors. I also don't understand what it is you are writing about and I have been a Christian for 23 years now. Maybe you should rework this one. It has some good thoughts but I think you should work on it a bit. Just my opinions for what they are worth.

Sheri Adams

Jesus lives in my heart! He can in yours too!!!
Sheri Liegh Adams
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Joyce Johnson

Member Rara Avis

since 2001-03-10

Posts 9912
Washington State

3 posted 2006-03-12 10:15 PM

I passed this up before since I did not understand it completely. Did you purposely leave undecipherable words in it for effect?
Joyce

[This message has been edited by Joyce Johnson (03-13-2006 02:44 AM).]

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

4 posted 2006-03-12 10:34 PM

The font seems to mess up on this site for one reason or another.

I speak insanity. I write fantasy. I sleep reality.

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