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red regret |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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rage on silent voice, rage on rage against a dark sky that knows no light and against walls that hold no echo save the beating of your own pulse rage on in sarcastic tones of harshest language speaking in a cadence that rushes on headlong into nothingness at a hundred twelve beats per minute to start and doesn't stop until it reaches the speed of darkeness hurtling through so fast, there's barely time to stop and think about regret rage on silent voice, rage on rage on silent voice, rage on rage against the unseen soul with clenched fist and upturned jaw holding the keyed sword tightly in your other hand ready to strike and bring it down should it offend rage on while your blood boils and teems like the river Styx at wave heights of unimaginable width and chop flooding their eyes with the burnt umber of temper casting the world in a color far too harsh and too dark to be called a simple red rage on silent voice, rage on rage on silent voice, rage on rage your unthought thoughts to a rational mind with deaf ears raise your shiv-filled voice and hand to strike with pain at the place that bleeds the most blood rage on while your fists fly and your hands slap the air striking against the fleshed anvil with resounding thuds leaving the mark of your handiwork there for all to see yet, being hidden by the gauze of excuse and alibi laying aside all suspicion that everything is anything more than what it appears rage on silent voice, rage on rage on silent voice, rage on rage on while moments of time meant for the heart are crushed by your hands squeezing out the seconds of syllables as each word devours each minute rage on as you attempt to destroy the clock but finding that the springs and falls still tick afterward stopping not the rusts of time and rage but finding that time can fuel your voice planting those seeds in the soil of the heart and letting them grow until the heart is no more rage on silent voice, rage on rage on silent voice, rage on rage on with all the other silent voices in anger's chorus each singing your own melody in discordant harmonies of life rage on against your own imagined hatreds singing with tongues of acrid flame and smoke devouring every word of meaning in your path until there is nothing left but you nothing left but the red regret that appears to be more, which is nothing rage on silent voice, rage on ------------------------------------------------------------------------------ To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
" and doesn't stop until it reaches the speed of darkeness hurtling through so fast, there's barely time to stop and think about regret" Sven, this is amazing.... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! Oh Sven, this is excellent, sweet friend, I LOVE IT!!! Such angst and powerful thoughts fill your words and only until the next driftwood of responses fill this cape of regret does the crescendo only grow and the anger boil deeper! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sven, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Sven! So good to see you posting here again! Excellent, profound write! You have amazing talent. ~hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow. This is one of your best EVER Sven. The power and cadence keeps the feelings in the words just flowing like lava!! Excellent sir!  |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Well, its good to see you posting again.  This has a powerful force to it, Sven Pen. Seems like something you needed to write. Just remember that raging exhuasts us in the end.  "two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Sven - powerful stunning excellent write my friend. Good to see you... BC |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sven, this is an excellent poem...written very well, with a lot of power behind it. Thanks for sharing your work. Ethel |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
------------------------------------------- rage on while your blood boils and teems like the river Styx at wave heights of unimaginable width and chop flooding their eyes with the burnt umber of temper casting the world in a color far too harsh and too dark to be called a simple red -------------------------------------------- That is some intense rage, visible, and powerful. You have given me a new view of burnt umber, one of my favorite colors for portrait paintings. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
A temple throbbing rant on unseen rage whose volcanic nature roils silently manifesting itself only in clenched fists and cord-like neck veins. Amid all the studies now coming out (even books) about smiles, their cause, musculature and how to know they're not feigned I've yet to see what I perceive as fact, that human faces at rest are a grimace. And now that you got this off your chest are you ready to write some more? |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Rapid fire intensity!!! SEA was captured by the same line as I, the one about "the speed of darkness." Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Tara Simms Hall Member
since 2001-11-07
Posts 87South Carolina |
This is a change from the usual romantic posts of the past, Sven. I like it! Raw, exposed emotion at its best. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, my!!! I don't think I stopped to take a breath while reading... this is very intense and powerful... and so very well written!! |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
How powerful this is. And so much a truth of the world now. Peace Sandra |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
You really have the talent to pick a subject, turn it inside out, name it and translate it into a powerful and spellbound poem. I think I forgot to breath while reading. Another fabulous poem floated from your creative mind! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sven What can I add to what has already been said. It is an excellent piece of writing and I enjoyed the read. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sven Yes, intense and powerful...break of pen! Excellent writing! |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
WOW ... what a purging of the soul. Your best write to date dear friend, glad I did not miss it. Now allow your heart to be filled only with love. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You have been missed....and by the way this reads, you surely have made up for it with a vengeance..... Welcome back, sir... |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
An intense and powerful write, Sven... I enjoyed it a lot  ~ hugs from a chipmunk seeing redLyra |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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