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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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 This is a memory of sky, scattered, the sound the sun made in the air, "slow down slow down, for now walk along this dream where sand holds your foot not quite long enough to drown." Yes, when I was there I could see that road in the water. Perhaps, if it was made of fine threads laying across to another paradise, I could walk with wings folded and place my weary there. Through time a spirit gives and takes, the movement dashes castles made of sand, a foundation made of ash blow it out blow it out and hold the rock inside with open hand. [This message has been edited by Martie (11-15-2002 05:44 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This whole poem needs to be rewritten by any fine poet's hand, and presented to you in a scroll, wrapped in ribbon fine, as a present... for that is how I received it. Brava Poetess, Brava... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Yes Martie, I agree totally with Sun ... This should be a gift to you...very nicely depicted in your words.. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Yes, when I was there I could see that road in the water. how true, how true this is! You have a fine eye for details (the ones most others miss) Cor |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh my gosh, I just adore that idea, that to me would feel like an Olympic winning athlete bringing home sand from the volleyball or track and field sandbox, to have the special poem returned to you in that form, yay! (kiss on cheek) Your wonderful words had me feeling I was walking on the beachside, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (11-15-2002 06:10 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yes... this is such that you should be given... wonderful work my friend.. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I'm keeping this one.  *hugs*The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Same as Michael, sweet Martie. Thanks for sharing. "Love makes the world go around" |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Dear Marti, How beautiful is this..... too many thoughts and lines to quote back to you, but this: "I could walk with wings folded and place my weary there." is awesome! And, you chose a perfect picture to go with this magnificient poem. Thanks for sharing your talent. Hugs to You, and God Bless Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Martie...May I just echo Karilea...and add WOW!!! Well done sweet poetess and I LOVE the pic. ~Hugs~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before~ |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
My goodness Martie, your writing never ceases to amaze me!! Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
This is a memory of sky, scattered, the sound the sun made in the air, "slow down slow down, for now walk along this dream where sand holds your foot not quite long enough to drown." Yes, when I was there I could see that road in the water. ========================================= We seem to be of the same mind...I too am returning to touch the warm again... still drawn to the tide...it now moves inside me... the memories are almost as sweet. beautiful write Martie-girl No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ... |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is a memory of sky, scattered, the sound the sun made in the air, Oh how perfectly lovely, Martie...  ~ loving chipmunk hugsLyra |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I can't explain it - but it is like you take something which is not ordinary and turn it into the extradordinary, and in so doing, I see it clearer. Tomorrow I shall stop to listen to the sound the sun makes in the sky Martie, and this I do because of you. My, but we are honored reading your work. I am in absolute awe of your writing every single time. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Geez! You have a way about you that just makes my mouth fall open and makes me think "wow" |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
"This is a memory of sky, scattered, the sound the sun made in the air" Exquisite! "I am a sky where spirits live. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Martie, the picture of the ocean fits perfectly in with the poem. Your words are in themselves an ocean, changing from calm to stormy, with vast depth, both calming and dark corners. It makes the poem all the more powerful. This is a piece that whispers its emotions, allowing the reader to explore as deep as they are willing to go. I hope the waves will settle soon. I used to make phantoms I could later chase images of all that could be desired then I got tired of counting all of these blessings"h.devoto magazine |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Spellbinding! Martie, I just love this and especially the line "place my weary there," that is supberb. What a glorious feeling of peace this has. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Love the picture, love the poem, love the soul. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"walk along this dream where sand holds your foot not quite long enough to drown." love the lines, love the poem *s M |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wow! You've done it yet again, Martie! Oh those beautiful portraits you paint with your words outdo even such beautiful photos! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Thank you so much for such generous replies to this poem. I was surprised that so many found it appealing, as my feelings were so "scattered" when I wrote it.  [This message has been edited by Martie (11-17-2002 11:29 PM).] |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
lovely lovely writing dear Martie - your scttered thoughts weave images that dance on many hearts - your poems are wonderful - Paul |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Martie~ Very touching and wonderful poem. Perhaps, if it was made of fine threads laying across to another paradise, I could walk with wings folded and place my weary there. I really feel the emotion in the above stanza. To be with that special one in your heart...Paul |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh how beautiful you write Martie, it is always a pleasure to read you m'dear friend Maree |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Yes this is a "WOW"!!!! and the picture takes it even higher!!! ...believe what your heart feels... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Martie ~ Just add me to one of the lists of your legions of fans! Linda |
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