Open Poetry #23 |
Loving or..... |
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
To write humility within Carrying the burden of life given by two hands as two become one... Sharing the pain, frustration and fears of the toils and turmoil within... Asking only to be received, respected and given equality.. Yet, the currents of mighty rivers course the steep banks beneath the walls....roaring in a chocolate flow Mixing madly with tears of rain which fall pure as crystal. Falling onto the sands of one self. Onto the sands of all... Can one find love within this turbulence flowing, deafening, maddening? Will shouted words be heard? Trust given....echoing... Unheard by ears.. Never returned until love is given unselfishly, freely without a price...yet only requiring commitment. If only two paths, similar... could be walked till the open glade surrounds in peace. As flowers bloom and leaves twirl endlessly to the ground...love can be found...growing amongst guardian sentinels reaching silently into the blue of day and stars of night.... Knowing what is....is And what might... can be...if two are one in mind and heart together.. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry Many searching questions and I think you have answered. "love is given unselfishly, freely without a price" This kind of unconditional love doesn't happen often, but I think if it does, it is foerever, even during turbulance. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling heart HOW glad I am to see a poem by you, and this is something that is truly utterly utterly utterly special. How well you write in both rhyme and free verse, and how much I wish I could write like this. Really magnificent writing darling boy, I’ve missed your writing so much, if, when I come back to the US I shall make sure I have internet access whenever I need it. This really is exquisite writing and of course you know I utterly utterly utterly love it darling heart it is fabulous Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"Trust given....echoing... Unheard by ears.. Never returned until love is given unselfishly, freely without a price...yet only requiring commitment." and then..... "Knowing what is....is And what might... can be...if two are one in mind and heart together.." ----------------------------------------- Barry...this is a profound write... leaves much for the reader to ponder. Enjoyed so much! ~Hugs and I've missed you!~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Magnus, It sounds like loving to me. At least once in a lifetime, if we are blessed. But often it takes the maturity spoken of here, before it happens. I enjoyed this greatly. Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Barry Your words touched my heart as they so often do and I am so glad I found this exquisite piece of your heart. I hope all is well with you. My heart has been heavy of late in the aftermath of the Bali tragedy and many of my words have been filled with sorrow. Thank you for lifting me out of the sadness through your beautiful words. Take care.......Sue I am in motion |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Dear Magnus...such awesome words of love and truth....truth and love. hugs for this one, Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Barry - yes, I do believe love can be found, like this write much... BC |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Great work....enjoyed very much. DeaDiAmore |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
A prize here Mag...glad I didn't miss it. ThisDiamond |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"As flowers bloom and leaves twirl endlessly to the ground...love can be found...growing amongst guardian sentinels reaching silently into the blue of day and stars of night.... Knowing what is....is And what might... can be...if two are one in mind and heart together.." (big huggsssssss) Oh Barry, the possibilities are endless and your wonderful words shine with that central truth, sweet friend, God Bless You, this is excellent, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Barry, this is SOOOOO beautiful. Thanks for sharing your heart. Yes, I believe that a "true love" is an unconditional love. Thanks much, Barry. Love To All, Ethel |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Geez Barry, your freestyle is awesome! just drags me in, to keep on reading, over and over |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Love the chocolate line and that last stanza most of all!!! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, Good thoughts, good write, good read, enjoyed. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Now I know what has been missing in my life as of lately!--You and your words--whether they be of love, humor, horror... the list goes on! "Sharing the pain, frustration and fears of the toils and turmoils within... Asking only to be received, respected and given equality..." ...that is not too much to ask of another who claims to love you So much truth in your words. Linda |
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