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Tim
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since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2002-10-19 12:04 PM

At eventide a straying wind,
...comes calling cross the land,
Searching, seeking out the night,
...reaching out his hand,
As scented notes of vespertine,
...sound clear in tones exultant,
Settling over hill and valley,
...a peaceful calm resultant.
Above the stars come slowly out,
...from where I do not know,
Perhaps the spot where time begins,
...where winds first start to blow,
For all I know as darkness falls,
...a journey comes to end,
As nightime reaches out her hand,
...unto a straying wind.

[This message has been edited by Tim (10-19-2002 12:07 AM).]

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2002-10-19 12:08 PM

smiling---perfect meter, perfect form, assonance and structure.

A perfect meal of words.

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

2 posted 2002-10-19 12:58 PM

I agree, perfectly.

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

3 posted 2002-10-19 02:37 AM

Tim,
Well I don't have enough understanding of poetry to write Serenity's statement. But...I'll echo it. WOW! This is awesome.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

4 posted 2002-10-19 08:15 AM

The quiet, gentle experience of night time coming on.... had I not read it myself, I'd not have thought it possible to write of such.

It so perfectly describes daytime gliding into night I believe a blind person, having this poem read aloud, could also "see" the change.

Enjoy this a great deal.

With Warm Regards,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

[This message has been edited by regards2you (10-20-2002 07:40 PM).]

Sandpiper
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since 2002-06-15

Posts 738
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