Open Poetry #23 |
A Daring Sonnet |
nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"Please don't go", I say, in sighing relief, "when love is real, all the world is in bloom. If you don't mind, the extremes and my grief together in moments, we'll while away doom." The whispering winds brought warmth in their touch. That day, I remember those startling words. Shocked but enticed, the webbing was such that I became spellbound, from what I had heard. Locked in a grip, or a vise that won't free, the power's not mine and the pen is your sword. In darkness you rise, to behold and decree, forever I'm bound by your tightness of cord. In basement, I live, the power of dreams. Come nighttime I give you my moans and my screams... M was sort of a "guess who" on another site where a poet is trying to bring back the forum to life... "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
A beautiful sonnet as well. Very nice Maureen. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
this not being my normal form of write, I am oftten lost in how the writer will twist the words to make the rhyme.... I like this however and had no issues at all reading and enjoying it... how's the lady today anyway? |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is a beautiful sonnet. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
WhiteRose thank you I enjoy a challenge when it's put to me as a dare *s Cpat...oh sometimes it's hard to find the right word to rhyme..I do try not to force it...but I am always twisting my phrases and sentences..some of that comes from living among the Pennsylvania Dutch...and it's ok not to like something of mine..I am use to it..as this was written due to someone calling me "an annoying little poet" on my old forum... so that is what inspired this write...I may be little and annoying to him..don't know why though as I never respond to him there..but I know I can put together a poem. I am very fine today Sue, thanks for this and the talk..I enjoyed hearing a voice. hugsss M [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (10-18-2002 09:14 PM).] |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
i am glad it got bumped. this is a really cool piece. you maintain the classic English form so well too. great! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Maureen, I love this poetry of yours, as well as all your other poems I've read. I think you're a very talented poet. Thanks for sharing. Love To All, Ethel |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Nakdthoughts, when you write like, this you capture the essence of thought and expand it. See you CAN write form and long. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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