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Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2002-10-18 10:55 AM

Her head tilted
Just bit to the left when she spoke
Looking for all the world as if she
Was seeing things no one else could

Unsettling
her words
left a vague feel of disquiet
Although what was spoken had
No undertones
or need to hide

When eyes met mine
they seemed lost in a maze
With forgotten beginning
No thought of an end

She began a tale
Woven from past
But swayed, distracted
As if charmed by the piper
Drawing her out in hypnotic chase
Of words to describe
Explain

I listened
Watching for fears
But found nothing
Except that her head tilted a bit
To the left when she spoke
And the world
Disappeared

RSWells
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since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

1 posted 2002-10-18 10:59 AM

Rapt attention from curiosity? fear? Was this one of the lost but tethered medicated? I like poems begging questions.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2002-10-18 11:06 AM

Cpat Hair
A good write and I enjoyed the read.

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

3 posted 2002-10-18 11:06 AM

Enjoyed this read.

Cold hands means a warm heart

jellybeans
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since 2000-10-13

Posts 2298

4 posted 2002-10-18 11:22 AM

I just can't believe it, you have been watching me?? ....*she asks incredulously and looks at the back of her monitor for a camera* you just described my 'yesterday'.....my...well...my way of hiding within, though existing without...but...I thought no one knew....

incredible profile of a person cpat...you show great understand of people and their weakness...and strengths...sigh

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

5 posted 2002-10-18 11:26 AM

and you are so good at this? it's eerie...
and slightly wicked!

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2002-10-18 11:53 AM

Ron

You have captured someone here...can picture her from your gift of listening with your heart and painting with words.

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

7 posted 2002-10-18 11:55 AM

Intriguing.
Warmly, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2002-10-18 11:59 AM

RS... yes it is one of those that begs questions and can be taken in many ways... once in a while I get lucky and write one like that. Thanks for the thoughts..

Sy: you're kind my friend... none of the beauty you share in these words or most of mine.. thank you.

Loner: thank you kindly for the words and for taking time to read.

JB: It isn't that camera on your monitor you should worry about ( chuckling) Thank you forr the kind thoughts and words.. I just write what I think or see...and sometimes get lucky enough to do one well enough someone can relate to it..

Ser... wicked? (laughing) YOu dear friend are always a surprise... thank you for the words...and glad you enjoyed..

Martie: thanks my friend... just playing at thoughts...

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

9 posted 2002-10-18 12:24 PM

Pat: must have been typing a reply when you snuck in..thank you for the words.. glad you found it intriguing.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

10 posted 2002-10-18 12:34 PM

"She" must have felt incredibly ignored by your lack of attention. NOT!

You truly are a wonderful observer of human behavior. I could visualize the scene as if it were before my very eyes (and yours! tehe)

EA

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

11 posted 2002-10-18 12:43 PM

EA just a student of life... thanks for your words... glad you liked.

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

12 posted 2002-10-18 01:01 PM

Devilishly good...You DO have that quality of making the reader wish/hope that it was written just for her...

and when you write for the man, him, too! LOL...

Good one, Captain. More, please...

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

13 posted 2004-05-03 04:24 AM

love this!

gemjop
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

14 posted 2004-06-06 02:16 PM

When eyes met mine
they seemed lost in a maze
With forgotten beginning
No thought of an end

Haunting. You're a favourite of mine.

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