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I, The Lumberjack, Kethry's Challenge
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I, The Lumberjack, Kethry's Challenge |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
This poem is a challenge by Kethry to write a poem using images of a shallow grave as theme. Hers is dated 12/14, "A Shallow Grave". . . . . I, The Lumberjack . Just you and your man-made grave, you think! I dare you, look down at me. See, what you don't see. You just shovelled your murderous soul to deep, dark burning hell, yet, think you'll live to perpetrate your deed, again. Turn slowly, your boughs of cedar height, abrasive bark, a, stand of tree, powerful as many, towering above me. You, filtering the sunlight, sieved through red-stained debris, covering me, eyelashes curling around dead leaves. Peek holes, my dark seeking light. Light, seeping from my spirit-breathing will. I, the lumberjack, finger trigger happy. Gun, buried at bloodied hand and hip. Adrenalin dances to numbing notes, vengeance, pain free, rock solid, heart stopping hate! Seething, teeth-grinding strength wells up, a spring of life, renewed, as one of the ~living dead~ is brought down by an explosive thunder of my rage. Justice reflecting the shallowness of your soul, as I crawl away in victory! . . ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (12-14-2002 10:31 AM).] |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Pat, you met the challenge very well, with a very powerful poem. I enjoyed it.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ethel, Thanks for the reply. glad you liked it. Still trying to learn to write creatively. Happy holidays, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Still learning, by George, I think you've got it!!! (big hugggsssssss) This is very creative, sweet friend, I think every now and then we fail to look from ground level up or from aerial view and we all look in perspective! (big hugggsssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Patricia, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Thank you Noah, and thanks for the encouraging words. I so appreciate you. I think I do dark, best! But, write them rarely, and never post them. I try to refrain from it.... leaves a shadow of negativity, I think. I need positive light always, but this was fun! Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Very, Very good, powerful images here . I would say challenge well met. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Your imagery blew me away in this one. Fine work, Pat The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Kethry and Michael, Thank you so much for your response. Glad you could see the boggy man....smiling..... Hugs and warm regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Rusty Junior Member
since 2002-12-14
Posts 18 |
graphics here are stupendous. Rusty |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is very good...and I do dark best too, dark and sad...that's strange, but that's me i guess. I loved this write! |
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