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Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2002-12-13 04:54 PM

Let me now…
Sweep the stars from
Heaven’s orb with
The wave of my hat
And capture again
jewels lost from heaven
When you came to earth.

Presenting them
one…
By
one…
As you sit and
sort for brilliance,
and size,to string
Them on threads
Of finest hope,
For the Moon to wear
In her nightly dance.

Let me then…
Wander in the vast
And unknown depths
Of your eyes
As I once again attempt
To touch your heart
with this simple gift
of love

Sunkissed
Senior Member

since 2002-12-03

Posts 610

1 posted 2002-12-13 04:59 PM

Very beautiful, Cpat. Feels like the dance of romance.

Sunkissed.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2002-12-13 05:01 PM

Sunkissed... thank you. An old one written actually from a single line off of a TV show... it was the idea that captured me...and I wrote something to fit it..

Ada'doLisdo'ti
Member

since 2002-12-10

Posts 123
California

3 posted 2002-12-13 05:09 PM

Touching beyond words...

Of all I've lost; I miss my innocence the most.

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2002-12-13 05:15 PM

Ada'doLisdo'ti Thank you. glad you enjoyed

Martie

Moderator

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

5 posted 2002-12-13 06:43 PM

Ron

A swooner! I like the romantic richness of this side of your depth.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

6 posted 2002-12-13 06:51 PM

Cpat Hair - love is calling, it is....

BC

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

7 posted 2002-12-13 07:12 PM

Ahhh, now that's more like it! Very, very nice and deep, Cpat.

Core

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

8 posted 2002-12-13 08:15 PM

Ron,

I have no problem understanding this one. It is incredible! And, creative.

This:

..."to string them on threads
of finest ~hope~...."

Like that a great deal...

WOW! very nicely done.

Warm regards, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2002-12-13 08:34 PM

(sigh) Oh Ron, this is lovely, sweet friend, yay, I haven't seen the original version yet but this is filled with such celestial smiles! (big hugggssssssss) I love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!'

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

10 posted 2002-12-13 09:11 PM

A beautiful dance thank you

Auguste

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since 2000-02-16

Posts 3953
By the sea

11 posted 2002-12-13 09:28 PM

Beautiful, romantic and with stunning, original imagery. Much enjoyed!

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

12 posted 2002-12-14 12:03 PM

The eyes are a universe unto themselves. I like the idea of wandering in them...

-MVS

"AS ABOVE SO BELOW"

Sandpiper
Senior Member

since 2002-06-15

Posts 738
land of flora and fauna

13 posted 2002-12-14 06:55 AM

Enjoyed the interlude

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

14 posted 2002-12-14 03:59 PM

nice to see
the soft side........
then again, maybe not........

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

15 posted 2002-12-14 04:02 PM

Capt. Ron, this is so romantic. Of course, this hopeless romantic love's it.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

A Tone of Voice
Member

since 2001-07-18

Posts 287

16 posted 2002-12-14 04:18 PM

the simple gift of love,......you have a flair la Cpat Hair~! simply lovely, *S*

~ATOV

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

17 posted 2002-12-14 04:21 PM

Let me then…
Wander in the vast
And unknown depths
Of your eyes
As I once again attempt
To touch your heart
with this simple gift
of love

Damn Ron, really liked the visual in this. And that last verse...perfect.

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

18 posted 2002-12-14 08:49 PM

very nice

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

19 posted 2002-12-14 08:59 PM

"Let me then…
Wander in the vast
And unknown depths
Of your eyes
As I once again attempt
To touch your heart
with this simple gift
of love"

Oh yes...make me melt why don't ya!

Excellent romantic write!
~hugs~

~ Season's Greetings to my 'family' at Passions ~

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

20 posted 2002-12-14 10:26 PM

thank you all for the kind replies... this is an older one that was begging an edit...so I did... now back to the cellars with it (chuckling)

Thank you again...

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

21 posted 2002-12-15 04:27 AM

a simple gift? oh my, so beautiful!

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

22 posted 2002-12-19 12:59 PM

Aww... (methinks there be more to this than I see here)

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