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brian madden
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0 posted 2002-12-12 05:07 PM


A cluster of leaves claw
from the edge
of addict’s branch,
thin twigged,
with infantile hooks
that latch deeply
to the milken veil of both
breast and sky,
in flux.  

Synthetic shades
of evergreen, draining
intravenously
by touch; its prints soil
cloud and linen
soaked in first blood
then ink.

First blood and then ink,
rustles the leaves,
brittle like knives
the spine snaps
by whim
falling
in through Venus
on to the thickets
and death.

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for those wondering where i disappeared to, i have got a full time job so my time on line has become very limited, also my muse been missing until Martie helped me to find it. THanks again Martie

I used to make phantoms I could later chase images of all that could be desired then I got tired of counting all of these blessings"h.devoto magazine

© Copyright 2002 brian madden - All Rights Reserved
Cpat Hair
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1 posted 2002-12-12 05:10 PM


Hey Brian.. nice to see you back..

some sharp images in this and while it defies an easy understanding ( at least for me) if one looks and thinks it flows quite well into several...

I enjoyed!


ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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2 posted 2002-12-12 05:25 PM


WElcome back.
Good luck with new job.
Keep up this good work...sharp as steel the mind that wrote this. TD

Sunshine
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3 posted 2002-12-12 05:30 PM



Thank Goodness for Martie's tenacity.  Keep the job, but don't forget to feed the muse.  Good work, Brian...I've missed you, but in time, all poets come home...

because we keep the light on!  

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2002-12-12 05:39 PM


brian,
Good your back, enjoyed the read.

vandana
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5 posted 2002-12-12 05:41 PM


enjoy your read
Martie
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6 posted 2002-12-12 06:43 PM


brian

You use such sharp images to contrast inner and outer feeling.  There is agony of loss in this painful write. I'm so glad your muse is back, and that I could play some small part in finding her.

Christopher
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7 posted 2002-12-12 08:19 PM


fall done fell, eh?

thanks martie - i always miss Brian's words when he's not around. i like this Bri - especially the use of "claw" at the beginning. it gripped me (no pun intended) and spun me through the rest of this darkly imaged piece.

C

Janet Marie
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8 posted 2002-12-13 08:32 AM


A cluster of leaves claw
from the edge
of addict's branch,
thin twigged,
with infantile hooks
that latch deeply
to the milken veil of both
breast and sky,
in flux.

==========================

very unique imagery and personification going on here...vivid, layered, contrasts and analogies.
Classic DEEP Bri-guy poetry.
Was wondering where you wandered off too...
good to read you and see your smiling face my poetic prophet pal

It's so nice
to wake up in the morning
all alone
and not have to tell somebody
you love them
when you don't love them
any more

R.Brautigan

VAS
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since 2000-11-16
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9 posted 2002-12-13 09:28 AM


sharp images could not be a true statement and that you and your muse are back is great!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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