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Sunshine
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0 posted 2002-12-12 06:39 AM



how it goes

jiffy sprinklings
are simply
candy colorings on
moments,
bringing back
what you were
to me,
what I still am
to you

even as
birthday candles
waxed under
yellowing flames,
I knew then
you would be
gone, soon

sooner came too
fast, as good things
do, you scampered,
girlhood escaping
into a world scared,
ready to conquer,
but not knowing
why

I knew…but we
had barriers that
seem inherent when
understanding
we both wanted
similar things,
as life
seemingly starts
to set us apart so
our growth begins…

I think of
tomato plants
being thinned,
roots dangling for
moments in
thin air, then with
a rush of liquidity,
and a warmth of
earth, transplanting
is complete

boys and dads
go through it,
too

how it goes, then,
is that,
sooner come
later,
words that my
mother spoke
come through lips
belonging
to you, and you
wonder where your
wrinkles came from,
while thinking
that I am now
looking pretty good
for someone you had
to run away from

and we are
both
new as under
standings
are seeded

while you look at
your child
through my eyes
and wonder
if there will be
time
to change the
mold…

and knowing this is

how it goes

~*~

08-08-01
revised, slightly,
12-12-02

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (12-12-2002 06:51 AM).]

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Christopher
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1 posted 2002-12-12 06:43 AM


quote:
ready to conquer,
but not knowing
why
I do so love the way you worded this. Indeed, why?

As to the whole: I liked it, of course. I don't know that I necessarily agree with it as a whole, but seeing as how this is from a personal perspective... ah, we do become our parents in the end sometimes.

Christopher
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2 posted 2002-12-12 06:44 AM


oh - and a minor grammatical typo:

"to set us apart so
we growth begins…"

Should probably be "our" growth begins.

Gentle Spirit
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3 posted 2002-12-12 07:49 AM


I knew…but we
had barriers that
seem inherent when
understanding
we both wanted
similar things,
as life
seemingly starts
to set us apart so
our growth begins…
Indeed a lovely verse Kari.  Wonderful write.
Hugs.

Sandpiper
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4 posted 2002-12-12 07:52 AM


while you look at
your child
through my eyes
and wonder
if there will be
time
to change the
mold…

such truth and wisdom in your words--this is a beautifully written piece--enjoyed..

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

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5 posted 2002-12-12 08:15 AM


Nicely done my friend.. I hope the understanding spreads..


Earth Angel
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6 posted 2002-12-12 08:19 AM


First of all, I must say that I have been enjoying the photo gallery of your sunny physiognomy!---and I believe this may be my favorite pic of you!

Having said that, I now wish to comment on this wonderful rite of passage poem that you have penned! I was moved to think of my own daughters' evolvement into young womanhood and the various stages of our relationships with one another. I must add this to my collection of sunlit poetry!

~ Thank you, dear Sun!

Linda

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7 posted 2002-12-12 08:20 AM


Yes, we do become our parents sometimes, as our own chidren become us.....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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Gaia
8 posted 2002-12-12 10:45 AM


The depth of this requires a safe landing spot in my library. It triggers many emotional memories for me.
passing shadows
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9 posted 2002-12-12 12:29 PM


I say things to my 14 year old that my father said to me...and I'll tell her that she'll tell her children the same thing...it's damn spooky.
ThisDiamond
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10 posted 2002-12-12 12:36 PM


Oh, I can relate to this so well, as I'm sure so many can.  You have penned it clearly from the quil inked in love.
ThisDiamond

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