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Beware the Door
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Beware the Door |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Beware the Door The inquisition-warning shout Octopus of arms swarm out Drawn with a gravities pull Each binding of the blind folds wool. And the suckers gesticulate Hanging on each simmering fate Laying bait in tempting sign To bite upon mirages line Standing on a wallows hallow Waiting for the time to swallow. Mouthing on infinities bend Eating on its very end And here we face the hydras head To freeze us with a cold of dread To stop the threads of woven rhyme To hold the web of sands of time So do not heed this false of goal It plans to eat your very soul |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
you are always laying bait in your titles, Sy..just enough to draw me in and stand at your doorstep. *s nice M |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Maureen, Then the bait worked. Thank you  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (giggles) I would rather use dry writing as bait for this "hydra" then to sacrifice the beauty of rhyme! LOL! (big hugggssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, poetry is the beauty of language, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (12-10-2002 08:17 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, Good idea, enjoyed your reply. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling heart, you are a writer extraordinaire and this is another superb flow of your art. A candle’s flame flies your soul’s why Over the mountains up to the sky There in the clouds the angels sigh Collecting poems written by Sy Each poet’s word an angel’s breathes The soft words falling like autumn’s leaves To each question they say the same The answer’s held in this poet’s name A gift from you of words so wise Then wrapped in wonder and served in sighs The flickering of your soul’s clear light Takes it far into the dark of night I would listen to their refrain To learn the meaning held in your name This is exquisite writing and I love it utterly utterly utterly, Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I read a lot into this one Sy, perhaps a different take than your intent. Subtle political/religious conflict imagery emerged. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy...Oh, I really like this one! The images are surreal with a twist of Sy. Much enjoyed! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I always know that whatever you may choose as your subject, the results will always be excellent words of wisdom. Thank you, Sir. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
garysgirl, Thank you love. Martie With a twist of Sy, thank you dear. Midnitesun Thank you, you are a good reader. Marsha You are utterly kind and a wonderful poet. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
I too see a swipe at political/religious impropriety, but realize that lately you've been penning quite a bit about our ephemeral nature. Don't expect a clarification just want you to know I was here and appreciate. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Sy...now you are baring our bones to core weight.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RSWells The cocktail is a mixture. Thank you for the kind words. Sunshine You mean Dem bones? LOL |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The inquisition-warning shout Octopus of arms swarm out Drawn with a gravities pull Each binding of the blind folds wool. And the suckers gesticulate Hanging on each simmering fate Laying bait in tempting sign To bite upon mirages line And here we face the hydras head To freeze us with a cold of dread ========================================= Could this poem be any cooler???  Look at the word play..the personification...the analogies, metaphors and the symbolisms played to poetic perfection Each binding of the blind folds wool. love that lines wit, wisdom and clever intend. Your rhymes rock...and it rolls me  *ww*  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Waiting for the time to swallow. Sey - one of your most powerful. I hope she/he takes heed. I know I will take this to heart. Cor |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Thanks for rocking and rolling to three bags full. I recieved your pictures and they were beautiful and I owe you a letter. I'll try to get one off tonight barring the unforseen. Miss you, WWRS :kiss; Corinne And you are all heart. Thank you |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Perhaps it's my own bent that leads me to interpret it this way but wariness of ideals is what I took from this perfectly penned poem. If so, I'm very much in agreement, if not well it was enjoyed immensely regardless of silly misinterpretations on my part  raph OOps looks like midnite already had this thought. [This message has been edited by Aenimal (12-10-2002 10:13 PM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Aenimal Pretty close, thank for the read and reply |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Impeccable rhyme and love the sound-play throughout! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
..and most things are not what they seem..whew!!..get me off this rollercoaster---quite a ride, excellent!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Excellent write Sie..... (I saw a sign on a maternity ward door once that read: "push push push"..... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
VAS loved that you loved it. Sandpiper Cute reply. Toe, That sounds about right. LOL |
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