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A Ribbon Of Sadness
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A Ribbon Of Sadness |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Soft like moonlight, warm as the sun a true lovin sweetheart, she was one straight from the old school, old fashioned complete freckles n laughter and pink glowing cheeks but now she's in a cell scentenced to life in another space, another time She married for love, her special guy but he turned out, the hard drinking kind And the years that followed, he beat her round til one ear was gone, couldn't hear a sound she was too scared to leave so she made her move and shot him one day, to cut herself loose Chorus: now she wears a ribbon of sadness round her neck like a weight and she's lost in the the madness of winning escape just a ribbon of sadness for winning last place a ribbon of sadness for conquering fate some things are sad, some are cruel some things are empty, after the rules and fighting for freedom, can cost more than ya got cause even when ya win, sometime's you've lost Soft like moonlight, warm as the sun she drowned in a river of nowhere to run Chorus: she wears a ribbon of sadness round her neck like a weight and she's lost in the the madness of winning escape just a ribbon of sadness for winning last place a ribbon of sadness for conquering fate. The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up |
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Nikolette Sadness
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337port richey fl. |
i love it i love it i love love love it! wow...something about you...i know you somehow...hmmmmmmmmm Nik i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Nik I appreciate the positive input. I doubt if you know me personally but maybe you do if you're from eastern Canada....smile.... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
et, only you can open a political discussion and make me want to cry. How you doin' picnic pal? I missed ya words of wisdom. Welcome back to Open. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I love your Chorus but "Soft like moonlight, warm as the sun she drowned in a river of nowhere to run" I've known this feeling and have only recently learned how to swim.  M |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ethome Good lyrics, good write, enjoyed |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Ethome! Excellent lyrics, another hit I believe. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Eric, this is so very heartbreaking, sweet friend, yet this is bound to be another hit that could touch so manys hearts with this tragic experience and the feelings on it! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet Eric, we all love you so much!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (12-10-2002 08:21 AM).] |
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Sunkissed Senior Member
since 2002-12-03
Posts 610 |
Well Written, Ethome, I'd love to hear the melody. Sunkissed. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
"...drowned in a river with nowhere to run..." so very true. Do you know how many women ARE in prison because of spousal abuse??? They truly 'just lost it' in a moment of madness and of final, raging back. And the hell they go through, now! Sad, sad, sad.... Great poem. Very touching; I liked it a great deal. Warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Excellent write, maybe too close to home base for me. I'd definitely cut that ribbon some slack. I can hear this tune. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric--Such a sad story that many woman can relate to with tears. You have penned it so well, you talented songster...an amazing write! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Excellent words, and oh, such a sadly true subject.... Do you have the music done, too? I imagine that you could sell millions if you did, because so many women could relate, in some way, to this. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
When will you link us to the MP, Eric? I would really like to hear this one! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey picnic pal always good to hear from you and I thank you for the kind words.........I know how they affect some......not a nice picture.....I appreciate your reply. Hello Maureen......Glad you're learning to swim again that's wonderful.....Thanks for the comment! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sy thanks for dropping in to have a look and for the kind thoughts. Gentle Spirit....Thanks for the excellent word I sure appreciate your positive input. Noah Good to hear from you....Yes, it's heartbreaking but needs to be exposed all the more so as time goes on....thanks! Thank you Sunkist I appreciate your words and the fact that you took the time to read this and comment on it! Pat It's so true so many women are affected this way and the heartbreak and pain they go through should never happen.....I thank you for your insightful comment! Thank you Midnite....Yes the ribbon should be cut some slack maybe even an acquittal would be in order in a lot of these cases....thanks for the input and sorry to hit too close to home but this has to be written about.......JMO |
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cherrypoptart Member
since 2002-06-09
Posts 109state of wordthiness |
I don't know where you come up with this stuff but it's very good! |
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quik Member
since 2002-11-27
Posts 91Dinwiddie,Virginia |
This is really good. Man its awsome. Thanks for the post. Its good to hear from people with such excellent talent to share!!! |
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