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Red Spot (Modified)
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Red Spot (Modified) |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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Unconcious stress brought on red spots he thought that his looks were tops but the ship was no longer in harbour and immigrants have already set out across the seas their gums would soon show evidence of a scourge modern plague of ills that surface to the skin red spot on a wrist or ankle..sign of a sin? From the stress of multitask jobs he took home and drowned in bottles, stashed under cots he raised families..unawares of sinister dots and came into ownership of family plots red spots blossomed..cell growth had gone awry then he committed himself to natural cures 'cause the medical staff had nothing sure and at night dreamt of palm tree breezes 'cause day meant the shivers...and constant sneezes. He created a life that insulted the order of things expected cell growth and repair soon faltered the boat's meager supplies pilfered and squandered his life on earth had been somewhat altered... red spots would continue to flourish he thought how his looks had been life wasn't something preserved in a tin. [This message has been edited by ecrivan (12-10-2002 10:19 AM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
He created a life that insulted the order of things... a wonderful line... I am not sure I understand this in it's entirety..but the visuals from it were a bit scarey. M |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
perhaps so...but here is a window on lives that weren't meant to be rosy...before people could relax in the comfort of their well heated homes..the quality if life was often dreary...not one of my happy poems Maureen...thanks for sharing. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
My Grandparents were all immigrants, and my Grandfather use to tell us of his tales of crossing the ocean at the age of 12 by himself... to join his relatives here. Stories that we will never be able to match in our lifetime.(and before so many basic things were invented and are taken for granted now...) *s M |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
An interesting perspective Martin. Putting history under the microscope reveals many blemishes. Healing takes generations. |
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quik Member
since 2002-11-27
Posts 91Dinwiddie,Virginia |
Man you are so creative with your words. I might have get some of your ideas. Thanks for the post |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Maureen, so the you can relate to the poem then... Midnite, blemishes can heal but are often just powdered over and cosmetically hidden Quik If this has given you ideas..that's a good thing, isn't it? |
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