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"Sing me Your Song"
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"Sing me Your Song" |
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D edgar Grey Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 174Hell...(aka Wisconsin) |
Sing me your song Filled with joy and pain Flowing with you Entering my ears And piercing my soul Sing me your song With tears of red And tears of nothing Place your emotions Into my hands Sing me your song As I quietly hum along Let time pass by As you empty yourself Into my thoughts Sing me your song Filled with joy and pain Flowing with you My response will be That of silence ---------------------------------------------------- I wrote this for my friend Callie, and I think it best describes our relationship. She tells me her dreams, fantasies, pain, life--everything. Unfortunately, there is a lot in it which I want to comment on, but I can't. Callie means a lot to me, and what I want to say would hurt her too much. So I wrote this for her, hoping it would help...somehow. Please give me some advice, and be completely honest as to what you think. The ending, I know, is weak, so I'd greatly appreciate some suggestions. Thanks. If homosexuality is a disease, let's all call in queer to work: "Hello. Can't work today, still queer." (If only...>; P) |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Carson, I really liked the last line of your poem. Sometimes we say the most to help someone when we are silent. There are times that a person just needs someone to listen to them. Good luck with your friendship.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Carson this really hit me hard because I have a friend who just tells me everything, she pours her heart out.. but I, for some strange reason, can never think of a way to reply. She knows I listen though and care about everything she says, and we're the best of friends. ..I just go silent when she says everything, I think it hurts too much, because I feel her pain. Anyway, understanding the little I do, I love this poem and thought that last line was the most powerful. Keep up the good work. Always, GG - And so it was that time stood still - |
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D edgar Grey Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 174Hell...(aka Wisconsin) |
Thanks for the support, you two. It's very reassuring that my poem made sense, and I'm very happy that the last line doesn't seem too weak. I guess everyone is too harsh on her or himself, huh? Thanks so much. If homosexuality is a disease, let's all call in queer to work: "Hello. Can't work today, still queer." (If only...>; P) |
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leafseranade Member
since 2001-07-06
Posts 118Wisconsin, USA |
Hey. Guess I pegged the wrong person for who this one was written for/about. Sorry about that. *blushes* (I still mean what I said about Khong though) Anyway, Callie seems like a strong person and I think you should say what's on your mind. She'll know you aren't intentionally hurting her because you are true friends with one another. -Kristen |
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D edgar Grey Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 174Hell...(aka Wisconsin) |
#^_^#,,,I told Callie what I thought on Thursday during group...still not sure how it went! But...yeah, I plan on telling Khong how I feel about him one of these days...maybe! >; P Thanks, babe. If homosexuality is a disease, let's all call in queer to work: "Hello. Can't work today, still queer." (If only...>; P) |
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