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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief 
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cool air blowing whispering in my ear come to me gently calling out beckoning longing from distance unseen come to me night time caress rustling my hair hands on shoulder fingers on back of neck come to me empty rooms spaces alone come to me where [This message has been edited by Effigy (10-16-2002 09:07 PM).] |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
cool, but i dislike the last stanza - you did not earn a list of words read with profundity. you have to use puncuation here to get your point across. |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
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forne_marin Member
since 2004-04-13
Posts 140Spartanburg, South Carolina |
But Profundity doesn't gargle blue words on hats when punctuation needs three times. I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry. |
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